Copper plus sulphur was an equation for confusion
positive or negative energy made no difference
(both for me gave off a funky vibe…)
If it came to bonding with ions,
I ate my lunch alone.
It took a boy
with a silly sparkle to his smile
who said my eyes were like
the deepest ocean
for me to really understand chemistry.
Author notes
This is me trying upbeat, whaddya think?
A contest entry
- Short & Sweet and Really Upbeat {Edit} by HerbalGoat.
300 points, ended March 13, 2007, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Your poem is not completely upbeat due to what seems to be ranting of not understanding or liking chemistry, however I am not DQing you because I like this poem, and I have yet to DQ anyone. I particularly liked your third line. "both for me gave off a funky vibe." I also liked that you secluded them in parentheses.
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What a wonderful thought this is, how one get to l ike chemisty - LOL a boy will do it every time! Liked the message you tell in these lines - easy to read and understand. Short and very sweet and upbeat!
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Thank you!
You're so sweet to say that, thank you for your kindness!
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