I met her at the entrance to the theatre
And we agreed to sit in the back row
Under the stars
And when the concert began
She undid my flybuttons
And sucked my cock
And I shot off into her gob
And then we enjoyed
The rest of the show
[It was a Theodorakis concert, by the way].
Author notes
A lovely poem by "ZORRO69", your favourite in all the world!
- Dirty Rude Animals Especially Moles group list • next in list
A contest entry
- Public Places && Tangled Bed Sheets by bird-mad girl.
1200 points, ended May 19, 2007, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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it definately was one night to remember, that is if it actually happened!
hehehe
been there done that one!
oops i shouldn't have said that!
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Straight to the point
I must say I like the straight forward approach. I would have missed most of the movie do the nap that follows one that swallows! Non-the-less, I'm sure you would do it all over her again! nice write, Rhon
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I have no idea what it is that this contest called for , but I see that it must have been enjoyed by the host/ess. On a personal note....I see the possible potential [just think that as poetry is supposed to "show rather than tell"], maybe you did a bit too much "telling". There was no "aha" moment for this reader.........maybe a bit too predictable? And since I am reading it as having taken place in maybe an ancient Greek amphitheater , it might have been a bit "too blunt". But please keep in mind, that is only MY opinion.......writing really is subjective and I adjected my opinion [however without meaning to offend]
respectfully,
reenie
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huh?
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Been there done that.......although not exactly sure what a "gob" is I would assume its the mouth. Unless was concession stand food and she was just supplementing it with a "condiment".
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Ugg, did she swallow! LOL
The Greek Gods are lovin this.
Great write.
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Simple and to the point. Well done. I enjoyed it, I had to laugh at what I did not expect.
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Beautiful. Loved it.
You're a master of the pen.
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That was the funniest thing I've read all day. Came outta nowhere...
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Gulp!
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LOL
I fucking love this poem. wow. completely fucking awesome.
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loved it.
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what to say ?
well thank you for entering and good luck in the contest with this naughty fun write that has nothing to do with the contest (again)
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Not what I was expecting but somewhat fun to read nonetheless. A bit crass for me, yet raw and honest.
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Superb/Imaginative/Fun
A very humorous and salacious write which I thoroughly enjoyed Very well done indeed. Great imagery.
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Wow..... nice twist at the end. I liked this a lot..... I think.
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ok. so not what i was expecting to read. glad you enjoyed the movie. viyanna rosemarie
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Lol
Not quite what I was expecting when I clicked
This is quite a strong erotic poem. Good luck in the contests 
Pozo
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Was the rest of the show as enjoyable?
I think not you shouldn't have wasted your money and left after the intermission. But a tonsil bath is well worth the price of admission! Bravo!
(could you send me the address of this theater?)
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disgustingly funny,and you got to see the rest of the show not bad for the price of two tickets
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I gooby gobbed into her gobby gob!
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Thought this would at least be done in the back seat of the car - a cheap date is right! LOL There was no hill behind the drive-in so would have had to sit on the dirty ground, and think that takes away some of the thrilll of all this!
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I paid for her ticket so it was the very least I could expect. Anyway, there was no popcorn available.
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yeah.
i really dug the poetic metaphors and similes in this.
it's as artistic as a leg cramp.
there's nothing more romantic than a cheap date, is there?
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Good reply. I'll look forward to gold, then, shall I?
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shot a gob of gob in her gobby gob. cheers!
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Zorro is pleased with Cinnary's comment! Someone has good sense of humour! Unlike others.
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