Deleted, but I keep the page up so I can keep the comments and such (as the contest it was in)...
silly, I know, but it's how I roll.
Deleted, but I keep the page up so I can keep the comments and such (as the contest it was in)...
silly, I know, but it's how I roll.
Author notes
This was started for a contest a while back and then abandoned before it even reached AP. It has a meaning [really, I promise]... I'm just not sure if it is "loud" enough.
Ah. Poetry.
61 words... give or take a word. Let me see if I have it all.
Famous person? check (2)
Place name? check (2)
Local setting? check (bar)
item of furniture? check (2)
small gesture? sure, why not?
First person narrative? Nope
Ah. I love the Author's Note. It tickles me pink.
A contest entry
- Two People in the Street: Kiko & Lucia by Heart Sutra.
900 points, ended March 2, 2007, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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came back to this ... it was well worth a revisit
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at first i found this funny, and then i saw you won a gold trophy, so now its not funny, and i think thats the sleep aids talking again.. Buk and Bill, they'd be insaulting each other in genres completely opposite the other, that could be exciting..
i wanna throw sexton or plath in and let the threesome boil...
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Why funny at first but not so, now?
LOL At first, I wanted to throw in a female (Sexton or Plath) but thought that might be overkill.
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Well deserving of the gold. Truly, a snapshot piece if I've ever read one. You are brilliant.
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i love this.
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Ah. Thank you.
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You ought to send this one out for publication. This is excellente baby!
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You really think so?
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This is excellent!
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Ah,nicelydone!
fuck.thespacebardoesn'twork..that'sbloodyschool compuetersforyou.
gaa..i.was.going.to.type.a.hue.essay.as.well...
sowy.
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OH!
This is excellent. OH!
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This is very unique, creative, and interesting... who else would ever have come up with this? I love the line "somewhere between San Pedro & heaven." The place name gives you a defined image, while heaven, being an infinity of sorts, is the exact opposite, creating an interesting feeling for the reader.
BEST of luck in the contest, I hope you do really well.
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so unique
You are a gem.....your poetry is like no other...
Bravo to this, my dear friend!
Lynda
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Very unique, some poems are just like that - beats anything else I can say. Interesting contest - unique as well - one of a kind.
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hmm...
i don't really understand this but i guess it's ok -
I think it's cool. Got some good right brain stuff here all splayed out.
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This exceeds good.
Excellent.
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What does . mean? Is it bad?
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lol - i forgot the applauds!
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