Red roses are a myth like love
He doesn't see the real me
I thought he saw who I was
But maybe it was just a dream
The days go by
I'm still not worth his time
But to think that about a girl like me
Isn't exactly a crime
I just wish a boy would show up at my door
With a dozen red roses in a beautiful bouquet
But the red rose died with my love
And there on the ground it lay
Author notes
The ending is kinda weird and doesn't really fit, but it's what I felt.
A contest entry
- True love by tiffydawn08.
345 points, ended March 29, 2007, 12 entries
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Aww
Yes, very well spoken here. I used to be like this. All the time. I think it actually fits at the ending, but that is because I am weird and find a way around EVERYTHING.
Very strong emotion here. I was like this about a month ago with a very dear friend of mine, that I had fallen in love with. He didn't care much for me though. D:
If I was a boy, I would give you all the roses you'd want. Cause that's just how I am towards a person who needs love. ^_^
Best of luck to you and I really loved your poem! It amazed and inspired me.
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this is a very heartfelt poem and a girl will feel this at some time in her life. i read a little passage that is what the person in this poem would like it was " he gave her 11 red roses and 1 fake one and said i will stop loving you when the last one dies' i hope that this is what you have found this was a beautifully written poem well done
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I like how you hope for the red roses to appear in your life and fill it with passion and love but seem to understand or accept that it seems as though the black rose of death and despair is what rules your life. Good write.
-Nick
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Nice
It is a fairly good poem good luck in the contest -
short and to the point. a bit depressing but its a good write
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i absolutly love this! especially the middle stanza..it's short and curious..but great write i absolutly love it!
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Great
Great! It's short yet sweet. It emphizizes the feelings of love. And, the ending was perfect! "But the red rose died with my love" "And there on the ground it lay" Perfect! You must have put a lot of emotion and hardship into this poem, and for that 10/10
P.S. Are you showing him the real you?
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