Inside her heart is breaking
Everything she loves is ending
Leaving her broken when he split
Who knew he was only pretending
She can't cope with it being over
The pain so strong she feels like dying
staring at pictures of them together
Lying all alone in her room crying
With no clue where to turn now
Her whole body quivering and aching
All the good gone in this world
Inside her heart is breaking
Author notes
I used both options 2 and 3 the quote and the wordbank
A contest entry
- Heart Broken by SensualWhispers.
425 points, ended March 6, 2007, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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"Leaving her broken when he split
Who knew he was only pretending"
i loved those lines... i have felt like this so many times its not funny... hope u dont feel this again -
Amazing
It's so amazing how you seem to understand women. The depth of our falling and the depth of our emotion. I like this one very sad and just about every woman I imagine could relate to it. Wonderfully done. -
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I understand them because I can relate to them better then men and yes this is a pretty sad write
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Very good...
... Knows how this feels way too often. And it's funny how you cling to those that you think will be there forever for you and they end up ripping your apart. Not just your heart, but your spirit, your soul, everything. It just hurts and I know it. Great poem. Thank you for entering and the best of luck to you. Kassie -
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I'm sorry youve had so many experiences such as that but glad you liked my writing
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this fits what was asked completely... well done ona fantastic write. i loved the whole thing it was emotional and full of imagery. i wish you well in the contest
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thank you I tried to fit the contest as well as i could
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