There's sugar in my yesterdays ~~
And smiles in the 'morrows.
Laughter like a coating glaze ~~
That covers all my foolish ways ~~
And erases all my sorrows.
Candy kisses in sweet delight ~~
Just as I close my eyes.
Warmth that blankets through the night ~~
Deep into the morning's bright ~~
New dreams in a sunrise.
Author notes
I heart Emal poems.
A contest entry
- Short & Sweet and Really Upbeat {Edit} by HerbalGoat.
300 points, ended March 13, 2007, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - biggest contest in allpoetry history! (i hope) need 1,000 entries!! by Gasp.
1300 points, ended July 11, 2007, 638 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please [don't] tell me what you think
Comments
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Dreamy of tomorrow
I think this went very well with the contest. A unique way of reflecting the positive attitude we should all harbor in our hearts for the promise of a new day. Very uplifting and unique from much of what I have read here on AP. I love the diction most of all!
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Wowzee isn't all in attempting?
Das (http://www.daskeyboard.com/face.html ?),
"Emal" electrically writes of work on being connected, not just plugged into basics in ways.
The first line is not so sappily pulling us along, as upeat is by what we've heard with forwardness carrying out some more for conditions. But it has a silly alliteration like with let's see.
And shall we really yet
"That covers all my foolish ways ~~"
is noting how a chuckle might not be a let change for softness that depresses self frustration. But it seems a stand that isn't that dizzy for a second.
Thus, the "Candy kisses in sweet delight ~~" gets dashingly included as helpful, like the touch that isn't all serious but cane sugar dessert. Which love is, the reflex of [& for] the finishing touch!
So, safe for a savor maybe, you have it directed for additional takes also it seems for conclusion.
3:46 no crying but ringing,
Carolyn -
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So, after 8 or so reads of this comment, and a few opinions solicitied, I have decided it is a compliment. Thanks!
I am not at all sure what to make of your writing... I guess the sentences come together at the end, but there are still a few that have me scratching my head. We've decided you are either a genius or completely insane. I suppose there is soemthing to be said in the reality that no one can really tell.
Anyway, thanks for taking the time.
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Lovely
Great use of rhyme. It was very positive and uplifting to read. Thanks so much for sharing. =) And thank you for your comment on my poem.
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Beautiful Write
so beautiful and filled with such a lovely peace about it,makes me want to read it over,and over,and over again.Just breath taken.
Blessings
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Bravo Bravo Bravo
Beautifully written and it flowed so awesome. You did a amazing job on this piece. Short but you told alot of emotion and feelings. Love these stance (Lisa)
"Candy kisses in sweet delight ~~
Just as I close my eyes.
Warmth that blankets through the night ~~
Deep into the morning's bright ~~
New dreams in a sunrise."
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This is ana amazing write, i litterally had to stop and i swear for a moment i just stopped, i think i had to - just to absorb the creativity of this and the intensity of the language and imagery you create in this.
Speechless...just wow!
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Ooooh, I really liked this! Now this is what I call creative and up-beat for sure.
SO glad I came to your page to check our your work. Awesome. I have to read some more.
Favorite Line:
Deep into the morning's bright ~~
New dreams in a sunrise.
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I read this and it felt like I was
riding a bike up and down hills...Very
nice feeling, my friend. This should do
well in the contest. Love, Lane
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lovely
laughter like coating glaze
that covers all my foolish ways
and erases all my sorrows
I thought these lines excellent...I also love when morrow and sorrow are rhymed properly cause it reminds me of Edgar
uplifting classic feel with an ending that leaves one with optimism...thanks
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fantastic
I thing this is one of the most delightful poems I read in a long time. I don't remember reading any of your work before. This one is short and to the point and I love that in a write. Keep up the good work!!!!!!!
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Thanks.. it really isn't my cup of tea, just had to write it for a contest where I had already won my way into the second round.
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Meh... I like the image they leave... plus, it should make people pause after each of the lines that have them, which is what I want.
This is not a very easy topic for me... about as hard as asking me to write an emo poem, so I don't expect to win... but what the hell, it was fun anyway. -
Great piece for this contest. I don't know about Emal poems, but if your punctuation and symbol use is not part of the form, I would suggest removing them and leaving it as is, then. Yes, it would just be another poem with a friend rhymes, but it would fit better when reading it.
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happy!
Happy little poem, reminds me of a song I use to sing as a child. ''The Big Rock Candy Mountain''
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I've never heard of emal poems before, but I really like this poem. I love the rhyming and just pretty much everything about it! And it definitely IS short, sweet, and very upbeat, so I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
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It's short, very sweet, has great style and I don't know why it hasn't been commented on yet! I like it
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