Tonight I shall be uncharacteristically pessimistic
I'm gonna spout some introspection
I wanna bring you down with my dejection
While I languish in anguish
And revel in rejection...
Join me on a journey in a retrograde direction
Usually I'm pretty happy
But recently I've been frowning
The pressure's rebuilding
It feels like I'm drowning
It's a scary road I'm travelling
I don't know where I'm going
My life is unravelling
What will grow from these seeds I'm sowing?
I can't see the point of why I am here
Does anyone know or care?
Would you or could you help me shed this fear?
The optimist in me has died
God only knows if it'll ever be reborn
I don't remember the last time I cried
But that's more about numbness than a matter of pride
I feel torn and I am forlorn
I am suffering from psychological pain
Unbalanced chemicals are bathing my brain
And I think I have gone insane
Again.
Please tell me what you think
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Nice flow, very good narration, and nice imagery, but most of all enjoyable read
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I've never been critical of anyone else on allpoetry before...what's the point...its all objective...what I like others may not and vice versa...if I dont like I move on...but what is the point of commenting "its ok"???...and as for the mention of random...as if such a thing is a negative...loosen those underpants fer chrissakes they're restricting the flow to your brain. Now...for all of those of you that may find This mans use of rhyme to be contrived,,,and this may be a transatlantic rift...in this case it is intentional...its a thing called 'WRYNESS'
Do please try to be a little less anally retentive in future...I'm sure you'll quickly learn to enjoy your new found freedom.
As for you Mister Laing I do love your unique brain patterns and the work that it produces. I see humour intelligence imagination suffering cheek...all sorts of things in your work...always something worthwhile.
Thanks.
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you express your inner feelings quite well when you put them to words , very good!
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hey
it was ok but random
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This is really good...I really like the way you express yourself.
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ok i'm getting from this that you suffer from depression? apart from that you have rhymed all the words well. great write =]
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