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Inappropriate Staring

It's not that I couldn't, if I wanted to,

look you in the face when we talk,
but can you blame a guy
for the distractions provided?

I'm not objectifying you, really;
it's genetically predetermined in males.
Monkey see, monkey do,
and monkey is hormonal today.

Not that I'm flinging metaphorical poo,
just stepping in it and trekking it about.
The male of the species is rendered stupid
when the female is this...alluring.

I can't help but be ensnared,
not by your words but by aesthetics.
You want it the other way around, I know.
Trust me, I'm working on it.



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  • ladybug.
    July 20

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    Haha, I love it.

    "Not that I'm flinging metaphorical poo,
    just stepping in it and trekking it about."

    Thanks for sharing this with me(:


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    April 12, 2008
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    Congrats on the HM...
    Many blessings
    ~A~

  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    April 10, 2008
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    *laugh* Very well said...
    Best wishes with this entry..
    Many blessings
    ~A~


  • Swan song gold member
    April 9, 2008
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    Excellent poem. Well done written and nicely humorous I must read this one again


  • Tarja
    February 5, 2008

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    Amusing. And congrats on the gold trophy. However I was really hoping for more imagery than this consisted of. I wanted you to describe boobs, not describe looking at them.


  • CranberryPrincess
    November 17, 2007
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    Laughingly Simple

    And no, I'm not laughing at you. We - women - make such a deal out of these things, reading too much into them, psychoanalyzing men, etc. etc.

    Poetically speaking, I like it. Good rhythm, easy read. Also, it's written in words we don't normally speak everyday, which is what makes it poetry and not blah blah.


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    April 27, 2007

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    A really good piece of writing

    Now this is so true. I love this. Sometimes you can become 'ensnared' just by looking. I really enjoyed this piece.

    Wayne


  • raggyann
    April 24, 2007

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    well if you figure it out
    you have done the impossible
    for everyone looks
    you got me smilling on this poem


  • Star Shine
    March 2, 2007

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    Well done. Just imagine the world filled with girls who are becoming more like what men are trying to change out of. That will probably help you keep working on it. Because it can be the future if we are not careful, we could all end up objectifying one another. This is an insightful piece. Good work, congrats.


  • March 1, 2007

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    love this piece , it made me smile ...

    I'm not objectifying you, really;
    it's genetically predetermined in males.
    Monkey see, monkey do,
    and moneky is hormonal today.

    Not that I'm flinging metaphorical poo,
    just stepping in it and trekking it about.
    The male of the species is rendered stupid
    when the female is this...alluring.


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    March 1, 2007
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    Bravo!! Well said. I am really impressed! Thanks so much for this entry! Good luck. Jeannie

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