her wheelchair fell to pieces
as the car raced by
the young man didn't even notice
as she started to cry
she lay there unmoving
as the car raced by
nobody seemed to care
that she was paralyzed
so her tears fell unnoticed
as that car raced on
till another one hit her
and then she was gone
A contest entry
- Darkness Rhymes Too by Dark Whispers.
321 points, ended April 6, 2007, 27 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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oh, dreadful! awful...but pretty funny...
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This poem is not finished. You leave off at a point where your just starting to draw the reader into it.
Come on dawnOflove... i know you can do better...
though this isnt one I've read before..
It is good, its emotional, and it shows how the world acts today...in every way -
this isn't much of a poem and its not even dark I hoped you read the rules.
good write thank you for entering. -
verygood
This is very sad i hope this is not true but good poem. -
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not true to me but this is how society is technically and metaphorically
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How morbid... but really reflects society, really.
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