I wonder
what will you think of me
if I am naked and unadorned?
I wonder
if I remove my mask
will you like what is hidden
from the world?
My mask is courageous and resilient
I am scared and weak.
My mask smiles when you need to see a smile.
I am crying from the inside.
Tears overflowing from my soul
to drown and choke my will.
My mask is secure in who she is.
I am insecure about everything I stand for.
My mask is independent.
I want only to be able to depend on SOMEBODY.
My mask is trusting.
I don't trust anybody.
My mask wants to love and be loved.
I believe love is the slowest form of death.
I wonder
what will you think of me
if I am naked and unadorned?
I wonder
if I remove my mask
will you like what is hidden
from the world?
In a list
A contest entry
- Behind The/My Mask by willowprincess.
525 points, ended March 2, 2007, 26 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Please tell me what you think
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i love how one line is the mask and the other is you... and i like how you contrasted them... its a beautiful write... and i love how your wrote it.. with the indents and the style makes it very effective... great job...
-tabbykat -
Powerful
Sometimes we all hide behind a mask of some sort, sometimes thie true face slips out through words written, they speak with emotions of soul, this is a great write that has wonderfull rthym and flow, great job, xoxo John
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i think anybody that knows you would still love you for who you are regardless of the masks that you wear on the surface. i wish you all the best in th contest
cheers
Jen
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This is me right now dear one, after reading my poem, you probably know that already, I wish I had the words to express what I'm feeling, but I can't right now, stay strong.... I will come back later and comment properly
Karen -
A cleverly layed out poem that describes the schyzophrenic property of the human mind with simple but effective means. The real power of this poem is in the words. I think we are continuously confused by the tension existing between the standards of this world (which are meaningless most of the time) and those we intuitively feel are just and right. The system of communication we have developed over time cannot do without masks - it has overtaken our will and ability to think for ourselves. We may feel all what you left aligned, but in order to survive in this world with its stupid standards, we almost automatically apply the conduct you indented. We literally and compulsively behave in a demarginalized way. Thank you for creating and sharing. Good luck in the contest. Take care,
U
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this is so powerful. i love how you contrasted the mask with the true self, and how you repeated the stanzas at the end. great job and good luck.
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