Hearts collected
with a spear of lies
strung upon a hunter's
belt of trophies,
using love as a knife
instead of a bandage for healing.
Somewhere, fate makes
the hunter a prey
then the trinkets of deception
become fiery and torturous guilt laden weights,
sinking the predator
into an abyss of self hate.
Author notes
short poems
A contest entry
- I Love Short Poems by silverscent.
430 points, ended March 11, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This was an eloquent array of wonderful language. Although the subject was dark and sad, the language was still beautiful. I was thinking though, on the second line of the second stanza, did you mean "the hunter as prey?" Thanks for entering.
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Powerful verse You have penned and it speaks volumes without a need for a physical picture to show...
The words radiate off the page!
Thank You for sharing this...
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings always
and my Love
~ Desire~*~
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Thank you love. So touching as always.
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OOOOOOOOOOOOOOO Daddy ... Very well done !!!!
This was very good !!!!
Love Jackie
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Thank you sweetie. You always know how to leave the perfect comments.
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I really like the wording and images in this. I like most of the words, but in particular...'trinkets of deception' is very unique. And I like the 'hearts collected with a spear of lies'...also very unique. Good luck in your contest.
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Thank you. I so glad you enjoyed it.
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WOW! So true it is. I love this one. How hurtful and bad others can be. Yet in the play of life, they truly do hurt themselves the worse. Karma does have a purpose.
Well done, dear friend!
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Thank you. It is sad those who treat lives as trophies.
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This was great, although I'm not sure how the title relates to the poem? Keep writing, xxxxxxxxxxxx
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I used trinkets because I felt it fit the mindset of those who hunt and get pleasure from abusing others. My view.
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