Cheeseplants
dance to Oldfield's bells~
a deck of cards
(spilt cheese XLs);
a crocus lives
in my minds eye,
lampshade flutters
like a butterfly.
Carpet flows in
coloured streams~
I'm trapped in
psychedelic dreams;
curtains twitch
then breathe a sigh,
lampshade flutters
like a butterfly.
Catfish monster
strums guitar~
I sit and wonder
who you are;
I'm drenched in sweat
my mouth's run dry,
lampshade flutters
like a butterfly.
A contest entry
- Psychedelic Poetry Contest by Madcap.
525 points, ended March 8, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~Technicolor Day Dream~~ {Psychedelia}~ by James Barrett.
550 points, ended March 22, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - x |Heroin| x by Dead Star--x.
300 points, ended April 16, 2007, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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..I couldn't really get the feel of this poem.
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Fabulous imagery. Very nice read!!
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This poem has a get fell to it, no so dark not so light. Very psychedlic. Good luck in the contest.
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THis has a very salvidor Dahli feel to it. Discombobulated images floating past, and tripping on eachother. Great write, I agree with the comments below, a great piece. My fav bit was:
Catfish monster
strums guitar~
I sit and wonder
who you are;
I'm drenched in sweat
my mouth's run dry,
lampshade flutters
like a butterfly.
Thanks.
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Bravo
My dear friend... You certainly can write. Your poem is brilliant for its imagery and metaphors. This is how a poet writes!!!!! Good golly, You have laid the gauntlett down....competition over!
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Inhale this little penned beauty and you get to go on a magical mystery tour....heheh...lovin it...could feel, see the imagery...or is that just me trippin'??? heheh Good job, good luck!
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Quite the surrealistic magic carpet ride. Tripping with vitamin A are we. I think I recognize this landscape. Excuse me while I flashback for a moment.
Only thing missing was the breathing walls and undulating table tops. Oh, and the perma-grin. Excellent capture of the experience and well done.
jill -
Not only psychedelic, but also surreal, Alex. Great images.
Bill
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