I watch myself growing everyday;
-wiser, stronger.
Seeing a change in the mirror,
still so confused, understanding nothing; still confused, seeing everything.
I watch myself becoming;
-older, empty.
Looking at the ugly duckling that will never quite be a swan. Reflections of the lifeless Green eyes; Lost is the spark for life, only the dull cruel world.
I watch myself crying;
-alone, unnoticed.
Glancing at the tear that slips unchecked. The Barriers have been shattered, the fragile heart exposed. Shaken and bruised in an unknown place, yet still beating at a steady pace.
I watch myself live;
-bravely, unafraid
A contest entry
- Who is this woman??? by Sweetangelgrace.
450 points, ended March 7, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I Want To Feeeelll The Emotion(prewrites allowed) any subject.. by dragontuba.
600 points, ended April 3, 2007, 135 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Beutiful image of the harsh realities of life.
-Thanx, Papyrus
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Intense Write!!
Enjoyed this write for it's imagery and emotion. You have captured all the ups and downs of self imaging. I like how at the end you have renewed strength and attitue for a winning future. Good luck in the contest, Don
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I hope you dont realy think of yourself as an ugly duckling,coz you look realy nice in you picture.
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Despite the pain and torment you describe you have been through, I like the fact their is an underlying tone of hope in this piece. In years to come this will serve as a reminder of the courage and dignity that shines within you.
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I watch myself growing everyday;
-wiser, stronger.
Seeing a change in the mirror,
still so confused, understanding nothing; still confused, seeing everything.
I watch myself becoming;
-older, empty.
wow, this was amazing the image and the emotions are brilliant..for once I'm lost for words...wow..wow..wow..
Welcome to my finals list
this is everything I'm looking for..wow
Good luck in the contest... -
This held so much emotion through-out with the ending offering a ray of light and hope of determination and strength. Very well written. Best wishes in the contest
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Your poem was really deep, heartfelt and touched my heart, I liked the vague description. It is excellent for this style...
The last verse was what got to me the most. This poem blew me away i was really impressed. it reminds me of me.I think yo're so strong for what youre going through and just keep your head up...when things are tough it is nice to read a wonderful poem that helps express the pain.
People say they know how others feel, when truely they never will understand but the hurt and pain can be felt.
My eyes were tearing when i read this. your a very good writer...Good luck in my contest!
~~GRACE
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