Nightmares invade my sleep.
Where I am being chased by some creep!
Trying to keep up the fight.
I kick and scream with all my might.
He grabs me by the hair again.
Then drags me and throws me on the bed.
He pushes me down with all his weight.
I know now that it is to late!
He covers my mouth and holds me down.
My mother is nowhere to be found.
The tears stream down my face.
Please God take me to another place.
God, I ask and wonders why?
This is happening to me just a little girl of five!
Daddy's little girl he whispers in my ear.
I can smell his vile stench, and the smell of beer.
He enters me once more with all his might.
I am numb as I stare at the ceiling light.
When he is finished, he tells me with a smile.
Daddy will be back in just a little while.
I wake up screaming in bed, I'm covered in sweat!
I realize that this is another nightmare that I would never forget.
No longer that child of five years old.
But a woman who is now 47 years bold.
My past keeps haunting me to this day.
One day I hope to be free, I pray!
March 1, 2007
Author notes
Option#2 abuse
Option#1 molestation
This is about my childhood and how it still haunts me to this day! I hope that it may help another.
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A contest entry
- I want you to make me feel it! by unanswered.
450 points, ended March 7, 2007, 29 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sting me with emotion by Pleasantly Insane.
600 points, ended March 4, 2007, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ♥C.r.i.m.e, D|r|u|g|s and D.a.r.k. S.t.u.f.f. Enter. ♥ by xxRainbowDawnxx.
415 points, ended March 30, 2007, 16 entries
Honorable mention
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thanks for being brave enough to enter this into my contest and goodluck. I loved the twist at the end from a childs point of view to the flashback of yourself now. i can really relate to that feeling of being there in dream or flashback and waking up and trying to remind yourself its over. some of the rhyming was slightly forced, but a good job nontheless. tc, hugs, beccie
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This is so tragic. To be betrayed by one whom you love and adore. Leaving you scared and untrusting. May you find the strength to get through another day and this write will certainly help others know they arent alone and didnt do anything wrong. Best of luck to you in life and in the contest. God bless
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Such a terrible thing to have to go through as a child. I haven't gone through this myself, but some friends of mine have told me (as I am everyones agony aunt) and they can't let it lift either. It's not an easy thing to forget as it's one of the worst types of betrayal. If you ever want to talk message me.
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I may be going against the general consensus of comments on this piece which universally praises it. Despite the subject matter which of course it very powerful and made all the more disturbing as the writer tells us it is a memory from personal experience. But if you actually remove both the subject matter and the fact it is so personal, what are you actually leaving the world of poetry. An absolute pile of crap is the answer. The plonky meter is truly appalling; the rhymes are at best basic and really clumsy. The overall effect is that it distracts the average reader from really getting into the magnitude and horror of the piece. This would have served you better had you simple told the story in prose and be damned with trying to rhyme which appears to be a complete friggin’ mystery to you on how its done. On a personal note, if this is true its appalling and I am sorry. But this is a poetry site and I am sorry also for those subjected to having to see these rhymes.
David
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Painful memories will haunt you for life. Etched into the back of your mind.
This is beautifully written, from the eyes of a child and a grown woman. A beautiful write.
Good luck in the contest
Ryan
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congratulations for winning the gold trophy for this incredible poem. It is honest and vividly described making it emotionally effective. Well done dear poet.
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SIS,
Congradulations on the Gold. Well done and very deserving for the subject is surely one of pain.
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This is a poem that tells the truth and is happening every where.Bad experiences that even as we get older always reminds us the past. Such a sad plight for those who had experience as what your poem is. Good work as well with each flows of lines that shows what the message is trying to convey. goodluck to you.
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amazing...perfect...you made me cry. it's beautiful! good luck in my contest! -
Everyone else has already said everything I'd like to say.. But I'd like to tell you its very good. A beautiful sad poem.
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One day, one moment at a time. They slowly fade away. Love will give you comfort and keep you safe. Making them disappear forever.
Beautifully sad and always will be.
Love to you!
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dear theresa,
one day, the nightmares will cease ... until then, we are all here for you to listen to your pain and to receive your tears ... we are not separate from you ... we are you ...
much love, little girl,
marion
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Good Job
I am sorry Theresa you had past experience with this. I am glade to see you had pulled through this complete mess. Though the scars will always be there, you will always stand tall. This is a great poem very well written . Filled with alot of emotions.
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such a sad story... you displayed this with such image its easier to write things isnt it? i find that i can write more about when i was raped then i can talk about it... thanx for sharing and i admire your courage to rite this all down ♥ good luck!
*Abused *
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A powerful write. No one should be sexually abused, especially a child. I'm very sorry that you had to go through this and the nightmares that you revisit. I pray that the Lord will remove the fear and pain that these dreams bring you.
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Nightmares from the past revisit and return one to the time of horror, haunting through their reminders of past circumstances. Very sad and my wishes for you to be able to forget, once and for all.
Best to you in the contests.
Be well and be blessed,
Mouser
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wow. i get what you are going for flow-wise with the simple couplet form and so forth and the subject matter gives depth to the piece, but some of it felt a little forced and the bit without rhyme threw me off. thank you for the great write. best of luck to you.
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Another moving piece sis. I swear I will help you through this. One day soon these dreams will have no power over you.
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Powerful Write
I am so proud of you tawk. I believe you writing about your childhood abuse is good therapy for you. Maybe I am wrong. This is now out in the open. I know God will see you through until you are victorious. Write that book.
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Truely powerfull and drenched with true raw emotion. This made me feel your pain . superb write. good luck in the contest I know that you will do well.
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Your words are powerful and they flow symmetrically as usual. But once again you take us down a path that no child should ever have to go. It makes me feel so sad and brings back memories I no longer wish to have but I can't stop reading. I pray one day that God will take them away from you. Continue On, and with your strength you will make it through. God Bless
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this is a very brave and haunting write very well written.i hope you soon find some peace takecare of yourself
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And I pray for you, too, Sis. Man, this was powerful. Goosebumps protrude my skin,living the horror with you, being invaded by kin. These nightmares consume my very soul, leaving me numb, hard and cold. I pray for peace for my sister,Dear, let her shake this pain and fear. Amen.
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Great poem, my friend. So very sad the torcher you had to leave through. I pray that you will find peace from these nightmares.
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That's really sad.
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