I put my tender heart
in your hands
and you squeezed it
til ruby red blood
formed a pool
on the floor.
I breathed solely
to breath the air
that you exhaled.
You squeezed the
life from my lungs
and I breath
no more.
I saw new beauty
in the world
because of your love.
Now it would seem
I'm colorblind.
Loving you
has proven to be
the slowest form
of suicide.
In a list
A contest entry
- But we flew to far away from Neverland... by Dawliah.
600 points, ended March 1, 2007, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Heart Broken by SensualWhispers.
425 points, ended March 6, 2007, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love is the slowest form of suicide... by Yours-To-Have.
500 points, ended March 22, 2007, 79 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Well...
... then. Alright. That about sums it all up. The poem is very well done. It tells of a love that is killing you slowly.
Excellent work. Very unique. Thanks for entering the contest and the best of luck to you.
Kassie
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You do have a talent to write poetry that has a strong effect on readers. What you write about here takes places everywhere, every day. No one notices and barely anyone cares. But in different places and times I believe such conduct is considered to be a crime. I think the contest issuer could not have wished for a better entry. Most excellent! Take care,
U
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Damn girl! You are such a good poet and you made this so real. I don’t like it at all, the image is terrible, I hate it. Stop making things so real.
Not really… just do some happier poetry and make me smile.
Love, Amera
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This is just divine, you captured such emotion in this piece, I found it breathtaking... well done on a great job and goodluck in the contests
Karen
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