I'll never be
The person he was
I'll never know
How we got here
You say it's over now
That I'll never have to worry
You've never seen
The thoughts in my head
You'll never know
The sickness I've had
You say you know
All there is to know
You say that you fear
I'm ready to give up my fight
I don't know what to believe in
You don't hear a word I scream
Can you feel my thundebolt
My mouth is thick with mud
There is nothing left
I have not said
There are no more tears
That I have not cried
I'm not sure
Where left I can turn
I have been burned
I can't remember
When I was happy
I say we have to talk
I have to focus
This voice is to shaky
You say it's all in my head
I said so are you
But you don't understand
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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whooooo boi!!
Chris, this tells me you're going through a helluva lot of pain and don't seem to have someone else to talk to about it....well, I've got big ears and keep personal things personal....so if you need to connect (just for my big ears!) lemme know!
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hmmmmmm......... this write makes me think of the emotions and thoughts you go through inside the torment of being cheated on. An intense write indeed!
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Very emotional read.
You had some really great lines in this, for example:
"My mouth is thick with mud"
The poem's topic is very universal, in sense that everyone can relate to feeling this way.
I only have one question, these lines:
"You say that you fear
I'm ready to give up my fight"
seem a little jumbled, when put together.
Other than that, I like this. Very good job.
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