Walk forward,
in a straight line;
Turn now left (maybe right)
pace a curve, a circle:
then Jump!
Up, down,
up, and back down.
Walk through life,
1 to 95:
Innocent childhood,
to cynical adulthood.
Four dimensions
you've gone through,
now rest well;
I'll be seeing you
within the fifth.
Author notes
We, class 9, were required to write a poem on dimensions. I chose to write about the five, excluding the zeroth. The fifth I suggested...we had a small discussion on that. So...first dimension is moving in a line, the second is a line perpendicular to that, and so is the third(jumping). The fourth is time, an imaginary line perpendicular to the first three. The fifth is the astral plane.
Please tell me what you think
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This is really unique....I thought of getting lost in time and just forgetting where you're going with out gving a damn....very welll written!
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Unique and creative piece. Original idea and nicely descriptive. Well done!
~Lori
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Very original. I really liked this.
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Very interesting poem. I really liked it, especially the final line.
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The lines don't flow real well, but it still makes for an... interesting read.
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A tad choppy
As a cynical old adult,
once I`m started its hard to halt.
This is a good start but it lacks flow,
I would say more as now I must go.
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