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Split Inside

 

 

                                      

 

Inside............is where the precious tears collide,

                                     Inside there's nothing left..to hide.

Her.................heart is been broken beyond repair,

                                     Her soul whispers cries into the air. 

Heart.............just like an Angel now dying within,

                                     Heart is crying over "how to begin".

Is....................pain unbearable for you... my love,

                                     Is stars "no longer" shinning above.

Breaking.......down is a way for the soul to return,

                                     Breaking into from a lesson learned. 

 

                           Be gentle.....

                                 Inside, her heart is breaking

 

Author notes

For this contest I used

Option # 1,2 and 3

 

Form

I used a split Acrostic, it is a form I came up with awhile back.

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  • -ButterflyCuts-
    March 11, 2007
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    Beautiful.. I will have a go at one of these some day.

    Very gentle tone.. x

    jess- x


  • SensualWhispers
    March 5, 2007
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    awesome..

    ... very very awesome. I love the way you wrote this. It is very unique and I have never heard of it before. I love the way the emotions are piled in here as well. Thanks for entering the contest and the best of luck to you.

    *Kassie*


  • Inside and out
    March 4, 2007

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    This is a very good acrostic your wrote here, very sad and emotional write you penned here. Good luck in the contest dear poet


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    March 4, 2007
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    a very interesting and powerful way to write and present such a sad statement. I am pleased I checked this one out. It is a very clever way of speaking and painting with words, each line echoing back with a different line, well done.


  • maa gold member
    March 3, 2007
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    this is one of the most gracefully presented poems I have read so far ... and this is an incredible form you have invented here !
    maybe you could teach us how to do it - what about hosting a little contest for it ? I am sure it will be a great success !
    all the best,

    maa


  • josh-13
    March 3, 2007

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    Woh, this was a very beautiful poem, I loved it, this suprised me, I've never seen any form like this before. You did an awesome job.

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