In flashback fashion
The house is incomplete
I see the living room
The place we always used to meet
It seemed so old then
A dusty feeling touched the soul
I'd search the closets
For little things that made the whole
They all took their toll
I remember
Intimidation on the couch
I was so shy then
You always looked like such a grouch
But I knew you loved me when
Your granite face would
Crack into a smile
Your house no longer
An empty space where it once stood
Another house lies now
But not to me, it never could
Replace what you were to me
One day you're there
Easily taken for granted
Until
Everything went down
The fucking drain, to me
I see, what I never could
In my self absorbency
The love that hid itself inside
Behind my timid eyes
I see, a picture here
It means to me, everything
I'll never be
Faces smiling
Everyone who ever cared
With whom you shared
A special time
But where was I?
If absence makes the heart grow fonder
Then what the hell does guilt do?
One day I'm fine, the next,
I'm tearing up, looking at
Silly pictures of you
Surrounded by family
It seems that my whole life
They've been little more than
Strangers to me
So why am I so jealous,
Of what they've been to you?
Why do I imagine that I could
Be smiling in that picture too?
I wish I had a picture with you too.
Please tell me what you think
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Interesting poem, oddly tender yet angry, it has a great flow to it, simple yet effective, has an old worldy feel to it and the warmth of a simple friendship. im sure your grandmother would have liked this, hence the swearing, well done
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I liked this one...I felt like you somehow. With everything going on in my life right now, I hide all my feelings and my love behind my eyes. I'm afraid to let it out. That's what I mainly got out of this. Hiding your feelings in your eyes because you couldn't face the person even in a picture but at the same time you wanted to face her so you hold a picture of her close to her heart. Would you comment on my poem Without Dreams? It has no comments. Just click on view all poems and it's at the very bottom.
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Catch you later
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Excellant/sad
A very good write indeed, and seems to be a tribute to your grandmother and the, positive, relationship you had with her, that seemed to be missing with other family members. -
I really like the raw emotion behind this piece, and you were able to capture it well. Each stanza seemed to hold its own snapshot in my mind...a lot of images holding a lot of sentiments and honesty.
"But I knew you loved me when
Your granite face would
Crack into a smile"
That was my favorite part of this poem. It's amazing just how much a smile can bring to life the scene. Nice write!
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Thanks, I notice that both poems about my grandmother I wrote have swearing in them, off coincidence, but it makes sense I guess.
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