I danced atop the leaves,
that lie still on the scorched Earth
the only movement seen
is from my spinning blowing them about.
I sat in my room on the bed in the darkest night
kneeling at the window and looking up to faded moonlight
I swore I saw your face in the craters of that orb
but the clouds blocked my view so I could not be sure.
my belief so torn to two different sides
one of which is dark and the other is light
and I know that only one choice will suffice
so I looked for a sign of what could happen
if I did not decide, and this is just the reason why
I am dancing in the leaves,
on the flame scorched Earth,
In the blaze the leaves were falling from
the trees that once held them up,
trees now set ablaze so that the leaves could not return.
and heat rose from the blades of grass
the grass engulfed in fiery light.
The air kept the leaves floating there
dancing across the tops of the flames
they could not rise or burn and die
caught between the fire and sky.
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Hey, this is an awesome poem you have here! I really liked your use of words and description throughout the poem. It made it very colourful and the imagery was awesome! It also had a really good flow to it. Awesome job with this piece, I am glad that I was able to read it!
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Really good
I loved the use of colourful language in this, and imagery, 'ablaze' and 'engulf' and the 'flame scorched earth', great, it evoked strong images. My first impression, was right away, good language -
I love this poem, so wonderfully written, beautiful descriptions... I love 'dancing on the leaves',, you have used great wording throughout this poem.. I love these lines the most...
"I sat in my room on the bed in the darkest night
kneeling at the window and looking up to faded moonlight
I swore I saw your face in the craters of that orb
but the clouds blocked my view so I could not be sure."
fantastic imagery... well done!!!
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