Sometimes we find reason to search the unknown
Perhaps emotional turmoil or a spiritual quest
We look for a problem's elusive answer
Or a means to unravel a plaguing unrest
The realities of life tell us look for the truth
Yet that truth is often hard to name
Sometimes truth of reality and reality of truth
Do not appear to be quite the same
Our journey may lead us to unknown plains
Through fields of thoughts we've not walked before
As we wade through the shallows that lurk within
To find keys that unlock the unseen door
On this fresh trail of thoughts we may find many things
That were there all along, yet not before seen
Our mind becomes clear near the end of the trail
As truths buried inside are released from their veil
~ greg ~
Author notes
A journey through inner thoughts
Please tell me what you think
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Inspiring Greg.It flows with such an easy natural language. not a word of it contrived,
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Thanks Ronn,
This started out as thoughts to myself during a strange period. Then I decided to write them out in the form of a poem and see what others thought.
Thanks
~Greg~
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The more simple life is, the more complex it becomes when trying to unravel its knowledge and yet, when we take a hold of the complexities they become simple in their unraveling. Very well penned.
~*Starr*~ xxxx
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Thanks Starr!
Yes, many of the complexities do seem to be simple in the end. Sometimes it just takes a while to figure it out, and it can be frustrating along the way.
~Greg~
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Your writing is so intuitive, so revealing of your inner self and your thought process. This is another amazing write of the questions we all seem to ponder at some point in time and never really know if we find the clear answer.
These lines:
Sometimes truth of reality and reality of truth
Do not appear to be quite the same
Loved 'em!
~Lori
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Thank you very much Lori!
This an older piece I wrote mainly for myself during an awkward time. Can you tell? -chuckle- I came back across it the other day and thought I'd put it up here to see other's response to it.
I do seem to write mostly about thoughts and feelings, now that you mention it. I suppose that's when I get the most inspiration to write something down. Maybe one of these days I'll surprise everyone and write a cheery, happy poem. lol
Sorry I haven't been around lately. My computer was totally whacked out for about a week. I just finally got it right again over the weekend. I'll be by soon.
~Greg~
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Good start...not so "Truth Unveiled" though. More like a step towards it.
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after reading this, i get the feeling i might know you... if not you, maybe someone who writes very similar to you. You've chosen a bold topic and have eloquently portrayed it. possibly not the "Truth Unveiled" but definitly a need for initiation towards finding it. This is the kind of high quality writing i've come to expect from the inkwell group members, great job and well/stylishly presented.
-Mal
(there was only one small critical comment i have to make, the second stanza is a little 'truth' heavy.)
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Thanks Mal!
This is actually something I wrote from something that happened. I just decided to post it to see what other people thought. I've gotten nice responses on it.
And I know what you mean about the 'truth' thing in the second verse. Like I said, it was originally just thoughts to myself, I didn't think to change them when I posted it.
Thanks very much for the comment,
~Greg~
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Nicely done. Not spectacular, but entertaining and interesting. The switch to shorter lines in verse 3 is a bit jarring.
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Thanks for the comment and suggestion Minorchar,
I originally wrote this as personal thoughts and decided to post it just for comments. After reading your comment I realized that it didn't read quite so smoothly to others, so I condensed the last two short verses into one longer regular verse. It does have a better flow that way.
Thanks for the suggestion,
~Greg~
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An inconvenient read
Should have stopped reading after stanza one;
your search for the truth had become undone.
Reading the last words of your first four lines,
a desperate search for words that would rhyme.
Continuing on to verse number two;
What would rhyme with truth, that was always true?
The name is the same; I will play that game.
As a poet, I will not see much fame.
Shall we go on to verse number three, Sir?
`Tis sad your contraction fouled your meter.
For me to question the depth of your thought;
the use of 'the' in line three should be naught.
As you can see, I`m partial to meter.
Give your muse time, to have her coffee Sir.
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Thanks for the critique.
I see your a stickler for rhyme and meter. That's cool, though if you look back, the second and fourth lines of each did rhyme at least, but I'm not here to debate.
I actually wrote this as personal thoughts about a situation and just decided to post it for comments on the thoughts. I appreciate the critique on form though, that's why I'm here.
If you read more of my poems on my site, you'll see that most of them do have more rhyme and flow to them. As I said, this one was more personal and experimental, but I still appreciate the suggestions. I've only been writing poems for almost a year now, so I always look for suggestions.
Thanks,
~Greg~
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Very interesting...
This poem is a very interesting one! I really enjoyed reading. In truth, this topic is very close to my mind as well, and many times i'm inspired by my inner journey.
But, You could showed the way You felt in a very nice manner...
Thank You for sharing Your inner world with everyone!
Best Regards,
~G.J~
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Thank you for the comment!
As you saw, I wrote this from personal thoughts that came from a particular situation. I decided to post it for comments on the thoughts. I just changed the last two short verses into a single regular verse to the ending from another comment I got about it. I think it actually flows better that way now.
Thanks for your reading and your comment,
~Greg~
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A work of art
I love this and I recognize that you have talent. What a finely said piece of writing.......I like the theme of the workings of a creative mind!
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Thank you!
I wrote this one just as personal thoughts from something that happened. I decided to post it just to see what other people thought of it.
Thanks for your comment,
~Greg~
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