How sweet is the destiny
That holds us together
And how sweet is the love
That binds us forever,
Through trials and fears and wounds of all kinds
Our souls have been caught 'n ground
My Brother! How good is the fate
By which we learn to sacrefice -
And how sweet is the blood
From which our spirits magnify!
Author notes
This poem is just a simple attribute to my brother Benjamin, We've gone through thick and thin and now are the better for it.
A contest entry
- Short & Sweet and Really Upbeat {Edit} by HerbalGoat.
300 points, ended March 13, 2007, 22 entries
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Yay for dedication poem things! n____n
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I'm evil. and don't I know it....sigh...
Sorry I haven't talked to you in a while. I have no excuse. My life is very, very busy but I should make time for freinds.
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Your brother, Benjamin, must be proud of this poem. I'm glad to see he's such a fantastic person in your life.
Revision pointers:
L2 - typo with "together."
L2 - remove the period after "together."
- Your meter is off after your 4th line. This poem was great as it is, but I feel with just a bit sprucing up, it could be even better. -
wow
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Thanks
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