Behind closed doors
Lies a secret in my heart
Behind closed doors
Lies a pain that sets me apart
Behind closed doors
My true feelings are subdued
A fake smile on my face
No one has the slightest clue
Behind closed doors
A pain most unbearable
A longing and an aversion
Love described as incomparable
Behind closed doors
Into a million pieces
A heart no longer whole
All because I lost my Reese's
Author notes
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How about an antonym for longing? Like distaste? "A longing and distaste". I don't know if I like it that much, but I think it's better than gunshot.
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distaste doesn't sound right... *runs to thesaurus*
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^_^ I like "aversion" muchly!
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(lol) Now, I didn't see this one coming! I really like this for some reason... Perhaps because it made me laugh and I REALLY needed a laugh. Any who, I have to say that I don't really like the line about the gunshot, but to each their own. Wondermus!
Hell Angel
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About the gunshot... I couldn't think of anything else that seemed to fit, and it is a little off. Any ideas of how I should change it and should I change it in the other version as well?
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