Heart broken - My love for you: shunned away.
Countless, endless nights gone without any sleep
My mind so young was blinded by your eyes.
Days have gone by, wondering my sad life
And I think about the time that we shared -
From the moment I had asked for your name,
To the first time our lips tasted loves bliss.
Our souls once intertwined now disappeared.
Blank now is our sight lines for each other:
Hollow feelings - except our memories
Time continues on, my age now older.
Life moves on - I wonder where I went wrong.
My emotions stay young, though now I'm wise.
Long gone the naive heart I once possessed.
That love was then lost, but my life has gained.
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Option 2
A contest entry
- Heart Broken by SensualWhispers.
425 points, ended March 6, 2007, 33 entries
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nice
i love your poem...gud luck sweetie.
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thank ye kindly
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Oops
Please forgive me, it was a prewrite and it was 3 am in the morning, so please forgive me by not putting love bites in the author's notes. -
Sadly, you did not put Love Bites in the author box. This was a great poem but I have to DQ you. Sorry.
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Very good poem. Shows alot of emotion. Flows nicely. Definately an excellent write!!! Thanks for entering my contest!!!!
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Very good...
... This was very deep and extremely emotional. I could feel it through out the whole poem. Excellent grammar and punctuation too. Very nice. Beautiful work. Thank you so much for entering this into my contest and the best of luck to you. Kassie -
wow thats all i can say after reading this poem.. so much in so little....
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this is a really great poem. i can relate to it in a way. really nice. welcome to AP by the way
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Thanks :-D
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