I'm seeking a smile,i see what i want
i'm writing in happy,and loving the font
i'm hearing the birds,and the music is grand
like natures the chorus,and i am the band
i'm sitting in sunshine,and inclined to say
its a beautiful world, and a beautiful day
Author notes
i hope i wrote this right >.> what do ya think? upbeat enough?
A contest entry
- Short & Sweet and Really Upbeat {Edit} by HerbalGoat.
300 points, ended March 13, 2007, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Wacha think, guys?
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This is definitely upbeat enough, and you've written it just right. It's both beautiful and inspirational. I Actually think this poem would be better formed like the last two lines of your poem. -I hope you just understod that; if not, message me-
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like....so?
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I love this! It's beautiful!
I couldn't stop smiling after I read this! Nice imagery too! Best of luck in the contest!
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