Why i feel so lone?
Why i feel the Lord forgot me?...
"Believe son believe"
"He is the answer"
"Don't try to run away"
"Don't try to hide"
"Don't search another way"
"His Wonderful Healing Brightness always touch you"
The Wonderful Healing Brightness light me?
Cover us of full love?
...Exonerate me please
but nothing can cover me yet
i can't believe as i did
too much things stroke my faith
i can try to pretend but for few time
the truth always loom up out of lies
Why i feel forgotten?
Why i feel so hollow?...
"His light it's all Love"
"Warmly Love"
"Believe son believe"
"Everything will get better"
"The Shadows of The Past will fade away"
"His Wonderful Healing Brightness protect you"
...Exonerate me please
but the light never eats all darkness
i can wait the glitter
but don't forget Father
a new dawn means a new nightfall in somewhere too
and i feel i've lived on shadows of this place all along
i've been screaming but seems it wasn't too loud the Lord never heard me
how can i believe if i never felt him with me?
Why they leave me alone?
Why they hate me and nor know me?
Why this never ends?...
"Faith, Faith....Got Belief"
"They are confused"
"They feel alone too"
"They hurt because they ignore how have to ask for love"
"Inside they are wonderful like you"
....................THAT'S ENOUGH!!!
We can try to get better
but our leaks always let it escapes the worst of us
our forbidden miseries
doomed / repressed sins
all that we should have killed
but still throb fort in our heart
Don't justify more
You don't have the answers
you're saying all i knew it
there's nothing new
you're too busy adoring as to ask for something real
you cannot do nothing
and nothing can do Your Lord...
His Wonderful Healing Brightness blinded me all the time
blinded me of all the world around
only feel i spent my time along these years...
A contest entry
- So You Think You Have Soul?? by Trixie08.
300 points, ended September 2, 182 entries
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WOW
THIS IS REALLY REALLY GOOD!!!!
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hey thanks i'm happy that you like it...
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this is wonderful i really like this piece
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the same for you too, thanks for your comment on really...
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Beautiful!
Ouff this is packed with wisdom!! You make much more sense than the feature poems i never read no wonder!! God never ever abandons us but if we don't do His will, He is not going to grant us what we ask. We must fully abide to His gospel. Something interesting in Rev. 3: 16 goes like that.. I know your deeds that you are neither cold nor hot; i wish that you were cold or hot. So because you are lukewarm and neither but nor cold i will spit you out of My mouth.. The "L"ord is pretty straightforward when He defines the inter-relationship. Your poem is highly superior. Blessings xx
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i don't think that it's superior but i take some of your words: "The "L"ord is pretty straightforward when He defines the inter-relationship." that deserves plaudits....thanks for your comment on, an awesome review...
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The Lord Knows You
the lord feels you and knows that you are here and knows you're needs and we need to keep our faith and read his word and ask him for our needs and he will answer them in his time and in our best interest for our own well being -
I think everyone can relate to feeling abandoned by God, or whichever religious figure they follow. It's even worse when blind followers tell you "just believe" and of the like. Very deep topic.
I like how you made this into story, sort of. Meaning, I like the dialogue and the reactions you used in the poem.
The emotion pops of the screen when you used
"....................THAT'S ENOUGH!!!".
Overall, I liked the poem. Very nice structure.
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