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Hand of Fates Repose

In remembrance we mark the last place,
where one who's loved falls unlaced.
A soul's sudden return to innocence,
in lamented loss we experience.
Regreting things we wish we'd said,
love unheard by those marked in death.
Respect expected for the space of finality,
by all of now and future in municipality.
Tender love placed by the loving hands,
in this space relegated ,set apart of land.
There in peace lies treasured memories,
winds of change mark chiseled history.

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  • Tirrell
    March 10, 2007

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    I love the pic, reminds me of a longfellow quote...
    As well his sonnet the cross of snow. this is a fine and caring poem. very nice!!!Bravo!


  • hoodoolover silver member
    March 5, 2007

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    Thanks for entering this lovely write, it is very hard on people to lose a loved one suddenly as you have written so eloquently, I too have experienced this regret, thanks again.


  • grannyeri gold member
    March 3, 2007

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    Wonderful write you have penned here - loved the flow and the sentiments you have expressed so well in these lines - wonderful picture that serves as inspiration for this poem. Lots of truth in the message you share here.


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    March 1, 2007

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    gf, it just gets better...sometime you simply blow me away...this is beatuiful...it touches a tender place in the heart...


  • williamstown silver member
    March 1, 2007

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    The winds of change history chiseled indelibly./ I think it is important to have the last line rhyming to give impact. Memories, indelibly, is not too good (but better than history) Not so good as your finality, municipality, that`s masterful. What am I doing trying to improve your poem when I am in the same contest.LOL. Best wishes in it.


    • suseann
      March 1, 2007
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      Dropped the indelibly.Thanks."winds of change mark chiseled history"


  • NoWayJo
    February 28, 2007

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    Gosh, before the image pulled up and I was reading this poem I was hoping you had entered it to this contest--And YES you have! For me, this poem speaks the essence of the image, the essence of Dust-to-Dust. There's so much in the way of emotion and symbolism drawn within the three, with your poem pulling it all together so very poignantly.

    Best wishes to you in the contest...It really is a touching poem.

    Jo


    • suseann
      February 28, 2007
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      Thank you my one and appearently only fan reader! Ha!

      • NoWayJo
        February 28, 2007
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        Awww, your fanbase will be pulling-up soon. The poem is only a few hours old and half the world is sleeping or just waking up!

        Jo

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