I've thought so much lately
Too much stress, too much pain
This life I cannot handle
Im self-destructing, im going insane
It took just one cut
One cut so deep
Now I sit here all alone
Falling deeper into sleep
You thought I wouldnt do it
I guess I proved you wrong
I never wanted to hurt you
But it was happening all along
My body's so numb
My heart's turning so cold
Death's slipping through my veins
Onto my life, I cannot hold
Just how much I hurt you, it's hard to tell
This is not some cry for help
It's goodbye, I wish you well
Author notes
Well, I suppose this is a suicide note.
But no one worry.
I couldnt do it if I truely wanted to. I just dont really have anything else that I can write about.
This is easiest for me... Even though I kinda suck at it.
A contest entry
- blades or love??... by my savior-pedro.
300 points, ended March 22, 2007, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me emotion by LaLaLie.
360 points, ended April 14, 2007, 116 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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oh my this is so sad. im glad that you won gold becuase you deserve it. this was excellent...
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Great write. Good luck and thanks for entering. Just keep writing and pretty soon it becomes almost natural.
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impressive
thoroughly enjoyed reading this. short but powerful. great writing here. darkly beautiful. there are certainly times in my life that let me feel like i can really connect with this piece. keep up the wonderful writing. best wishes
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holy sh*t!!!
i LOVE IT!!!!! i think you'll win.. seriously, this is the greatest i've seen so far! its ferakin' awesome..... woah.. damn, well good luck in my contest and THANX for entering!!!!
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Thanks, im really glad you liked it, and quite happy you consider it good enough to be a finalist.
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U R really good !
I think this poems is beautiful.. even if it was an attempted suicide note.. its awesome !!! -
You don't suck at it.
I like your poetry. Seriously, have you read any of mine...it's all about death, depression, and suicide. Sometimes that is just the easiest thing to write about. Great job, keep it up.
I love how you stated that it wasn't a cry for help. I think that's what some people don't get. Just because your upset and feel like ranting, or doing something dramatic like cutting, doesn't mean you are pleaing for help or attention.
Again, great job.
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Ami. This is amazing. ANd i MEAN it. its very good [= im proud of you.. even though the topic is kinda :\ but you know what i mean. but its very good. && it does flow good so dont worry about it. your uber amazing.
<33 danii
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