I look up to the night sky,
and yell out the question, why?
Why is life so very rough?
Now my heart is really tough..
Even I can’t take much more,
such sadness I had in store.
And when I try to improve,
life slides me back in my groove.
So now I stand with my soul bare
shouting out in the night air.
Why is my life very hard
and my heart so very scarred?
White hot tears slide down my face
as I see I lost life’s race.
That is when I saw a glow
as the sky put on a show.
Northern lights danced cross the sky,
as I melted with a sigh.
And then as a final gift,
shooting stars were flying swift.
Then I saw this life was mine,
even though it wasn’t fine.
Answers are not mine to get,
at least they are not mine yet.
But He will not leave me alone,
He always makes his love known.
So if I ask why I’m here,
it is to hold his love dear.
A contest entry
- A Quickie Contest....Ends SOON by JeannieD Hunter.
450 points, ended February 28, 2007, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Very thought-provoking
My favourite lines were; 'Then I saw this life was mine,
even though it wasn’t fine.'
Many people expect life to be perfect- as if that is one of our human rights. It simply isn't- that we have our life is a gift indeed. Waiting for perfection doesn't work- you have to go with what you have and make the most of it.
This is a wonderfully thought provoking poem; full of ideas as well as emotion.
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thank you for that comment, I am so glad that you saw it for what it was and that it touched you, hugggsss!!!
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This is such a sad yet at the same time uplifting piece of poetry.
I loved this verse and the imagery is great...
Northern lights danced cross the sky,
as I melted with a sigh.
And then as a final gift,
shooting stars were flying swift.
Congratulations on the trophy. Well deserved.
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thank you so much, I really appreciate the comment, hugggssss!!!!!!!
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Very Good
Lovely words
Soft introspection in this
I felt your words
Like the ending
But He will not leave me alone,
He always makes his love known.
So if I ask why I’m here,
it is to hold his love dear.
Rick
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He always shows us he is there for us, if we will only open our eyes and see. hugggsss!!!!!!!
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Congratulations on the honorable mention. With such demanding questions to the reason as to our being a simple answer appears in reaction and we find the beauty all around that is His gift to us. We must then take that gift and replace our wondering with it to lift our spirits high.
Well written, be well and be blessed.
Mouser
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thank you for that beautiful comment. huggsss!!!!
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Powerful poem! Brings such great emotion to the fact that we sometimes just don't know why we are here, or why it is ruff. But God is there for us, and that is all we need!
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thank you for the wonderful comment. huggsss!!!!!
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Even I can`t take much more,
Such sadness as I had in store
And when I try hard to inprove
life slides me back into my groove/
Just my two bits worth, I think it swings along better, but you don`t have to agree.
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You are such a blessing with your assistance. I am going to look it over and see about your suggestion. thanks, hugggsss!!!!!
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bless you my friend and he is here for you
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thank you my dear friend, that means a lot to me. thank you for the wonderful comment. huggssss!!!!!
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WONDERFUL! MAGNIFICENT! GLORIOUS! this makes a great statement that i hope many will read and heed.
"But He will not leave me alone,
He always makes his love known.
So if I ask why I’m here,
it is to hold his love dear."
How precious He is! keep writing ! i believe this is your best yet! God bless you always
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I am so glad that you enjoyed this. hugggssss!!!!
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Darkness turning into light,
It can be hard at times ~ fighting off darkened thoughts ~ but there is always a light at the end of life's tunnel. We just need to seek it out sometimes. Our own lust for darkness can control our thoughts without us even aknowledging it. I often catch myself thinking this way and have to [mentally] throw that thinking pattern out of my head, In order to make way for the positive thoughts to take over.
Your ending was of light, in the form of faith, pushing the light into the mind of the reader, leaving a lasting impresssion of beauty... Well done.
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thank you for the marvelous comment, I really appreciate it. huggssss!!!!!
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Wow, the middle of this really touched something in me. My belief in God has slipped so much lately, but those lines got a spark going again I think. Great write. Thanks for this entry. Good luck. Jeannie
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thank you very much for the marvelous comment, I am so really glad that this touched you. hugggssss!!!!!---thanks again for the HM.
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