TEENAGE YEARS
Teenage years we have all been there
Popularity contest at school,no understanding at home
Worring about those things would be a luxury here
My life is a little different as says in the poem
At 16 you start dating and driving
At 16 i see no women,and my ar is on my weight pile
At 16 looking at 7 years i was crying
At 16 you might of looked at 7 days grounded only for awhile
At 17 you start your first relatioship
At 17 i star to understand prison rules because i have seen
At 17 all i can do is watch my back and never slip
At 17 you see summer around the corner,and for vacation you fiend
At 18 you start your last year of high scholl
At 18 i see freedom coming so near
At 18 i look back and see i was a fool
At 18 you see graduation less then a quarter of a year
Just a little look at the difference we have had
Just a couple of months ill play cetch up and see
Just like you i can worry about home and at school be mad.
Just a little while ill be there for my family
Youll be judged because of the clothes you wear
Ill be judged for my background
Your still will change in the years thats for sure
Ill still be looked down upon cause ive been around
"Ill make it thats for sure"
A contest entry
- I want you to make me feel it! by unanswered.
450 points, ended March 7, 2007, 29 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I truly like this.
It shows both sides of the story.
Your view, and then the typical teenagers.
It was quite enlightening.
Alot of people don't really look at adolescent years like this, so I'm glad that you wrote this.
It's unlike alot of the poetry I've read here on AP.
Nice write!
-System of Cyanide
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I like this. brought back alot of feelings of adolesence your rhyme was a little off but over all content was rather good. thank you for entering and good luck
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It was nicely written a lot of spelling mistakes but still good. being a teenager myself I know how difficult those years can be. anyway good luck!
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Well overall the rhyming was good... the flow was mostly there, but the rhythm really wasn't. Also, you must have whipped this up, because I've noticed a LOT of spelling errors. I kinda wish I was judging this for the content as well, but since I'm not... iuno.
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