I wish I were invisible
for I cannot curl small enough
not to be caught
& shaken til dizzier
than getting off of a merry-go-round
& have face stung red & swollen
as bee sting stretching skin
& I say I'm sorry
ask her to please please stop
but medussa with stone of face
& hair of snakes
hisses & spittle spots me
in white frothy anger
aimed like arrow of poison
tripping from tongue flap
fast words
that bounce off walls
boomeranging back
& when this is over
& before the next storm
I will recall these words
& they will slap me down
like she does
Author notes
NB Anonymous contest entry.
A contest entry
- Sadness and pain by x-Black-Butterfly-x.
370 points, ended March 7, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i believe this is a very effective use of short powerful lines.... you're getting the point across and really keeping things simple too. Best of luck to you in the contest!!
Dragonfly
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Nice poem.
I ran out of nice things to say today. So i am sorry you were the alst poem i read. But keep up the good work. Maye when im feeling stronger I will comment better and give you some type of real feedback.
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You have used really effective language here and it has helped to create an effective poem. thnx and gd luck
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I have a good sense as to where this poem is coming from, and so many times you've been there to boost me up from the lows that others inflict and I want to do the same for you.
I don't want to disclose what I know of your poem to outside readers, Girl...But do know you're stronger and the person you are today of all you've come to experience. It's difficult for others, much less someone so close to you to perceive that strength, and yet it's probably what they most admire and love of you too.
You're never invisible, never non-existent and never-ever have a single thing to be sorry for--EVER.
Jo
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This feels familiar to me, or at least my heart knows this feeling.... brilliantly penned... well done to you dear one
Karen -
verbal abuse is never forgotten. the words come back at you when least expected. you think you've gotten past it then bam...
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