The room is trashed
Traces of white dust scattered on the dresser
like thousands of lost stars drowning in the abyss
Tranquil music traces ny ears
He's huddled in the corner
Sharpy to the wall
Creating poetry as decoration
Evidence of our many dances with death
A line is waiting for me
Like always
He leaves a little taste
That's true love right there
The coke enters my nose
A sense of relief flows through my veins
You can't live when you're already dead
We're sitting cross legged
Taking turns drawing
writing
snorting
Modern day romance
With one twisted turn
"I love you better when I'm on coke"
Is what I write
Before snagging the last hit
From under his nose
Because I truly love him more
When I'm on coke
Author notes
true story...
A contest entry
- Drug Abuse by Page Shut down.
800 points, ended April 2, 2007, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - How you feel about drugs by 6-Ft-UnDeR.
300 points, ended May 17, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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i think that this poem is magnificent partly because it's a true story, and also because it's beautifully written with imagery that screams at you. you are a talented writer
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No trophy???
I'm surprised that no trophy was given for this entry, this is damn good...very in your face and straight to the point which is how I like my poems! you should be very happy with how this turned out, honestly you should. Well structured, coherent and just burst out of the page and screams at you. Truly worthy of the praise
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Thanks for your entry
I truely hope that you got clean and got out of this situation. This can only lead to one place. Death. Good flow and structure. This really has a punch to it right in the gut.
Good luck and thanks for entering.
God Bless
Tammy -
This poem has a lot of imagery in it which I see from your author notes it is a true story. It has a real nice rhythm to it. You did a good job of describing the details of what went on in the room.
Excellent piece and good luck in the contest.
~Snappy~
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