A bit of heaven fell into my arms one night,
I held it close and pressed it to my heart,
the pain of loneliness that lived there for a while
immediately got ready to depart.
There was thunder as our two hearts came together
and I'm sure our bodies started to glow.
I knew that I would never recover
but I wondered just how much it would show.
There were angels singing in the distance
in honour of this moment sublime,
and a voice said take care of our sister
then your love will last beyond time.
Seems a long time ago when this happened
but never the less it was true,
to prove it we're still very much in love
and we both say,I love only you.
Author notes
This is true and it happened 30 years ago.
A contest entry
- Bring me Love by Vampire Seductress.
450 points, ended March 29, 2007, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything goes by Beating.
450 points, ended May 1, 2007, 61 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - LOVE: Made for Each Other by Shenanigans.
1000 points, ended December 15, 2007, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - meeting your love for the first time by loving.
300 points, ended February 2, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Happily Ever After by Unstoppable.
300 points, ended February 12, 2008, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - My valentine ever lasting love by EeyoreUK.
400 points, ended February 1, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make me want to fall in love by Spiritual Soul.
1200 points, ended May 28, 29 entries
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675 points, ended July 25, 34 entries
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Just the title broght me in. I was intrested in this poem the second I read that. I love it all. The poem, the meaning, the feelings all of it. I am reminded of my love. He is wonderfully great.The feeling is amazing. Thanks for entering my contest. Good job and good luc
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aww I love this!! It flowed so smoothly, and held so much love. This really is a wonderful write. Thanks so much for your entry!
Blessings,
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This is a spectactular right, It truely blew me away I love the flow and the emotions behind this peace.
Thank For Entering My Contest
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awww... This is a very good write.. I can see why you have won so many trophies... its amazing.. keep up the grea twork and good luck in my contest!!
Shannon*Leah
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aww that's so sweet, that's deep ove right there. Great write, thanks for your entry!
Blessings,
~Michaela~ -
Refreshing read. Imagery was well done and it flowed nicely through out. Third stanza was a bit confusing as I could not pin point the reference to sister but otherwise it is a lovely piece. Good luck!
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wow this was great i could tell just how much u guys loved each other it was awesome great work
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Just lovely.
The metaphorical imagery is beautiful.
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this is beautiful in a simple, amazing way!
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the depart line seemed a little forced/predictable, but other than that, the flow is great. I didn't quite catch the part about take care of our sister--is that your sisters/brothers talking to the guy, or girls sisters/brothers talking to you? A bit more clarification in parts would help. All in all, a good piece, I liked it a lot, at least it's upbeat (I'm getting a lot of lost/repressed love in this contest, not really what I was going for.) Anyway, good luck, and have a wonderful rest of your evening!
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Not bad. It had a very steady flow and the rhyming was nicely done. You sure like to enter in contests though don't you?
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this reminds me of an old song from the 60s that goes when i fall in love it would be with you , i realy like it alot , how a bit of heaven fell in your arms one night , it makes me feel bright just thinking about how that would be , how the thunder made your two hearts come together and the angels in the distance , makes me feel like they are watching over you at the time , i know what you mean about this feels like a long time ago but we cherish the old memories because they were the first and the best , brad...
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woah this was entered in alot of contest. i can see why its a beautiful love poem! thank you for your beautifully penned work in this contest!
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This is a great peice. It fits for the option you choose. Well done. Best of lukc to you in the contest. xAngelx4xLife
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Good job....I really like this! Thanks for entering
GOOD LUCK IN MY CONTEST! -
Sweet~Sweet~and more sweet
this is just lovely and so well written! I thank you so much for sharing and entering...Almost like a song
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only you...
Well written... flows well and is very readable!
Good luck in the contest!
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What a lovely poem! It has a brilliant rhythm and is very well writen! Welldone.
Goodluck in the contest.
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great job. i really liked it. good use of imagery. great job and good luck in the contest!
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I loved the first line! It was kind of cheesy - but that's the great thing about love poetry; you can be cheesy. It was a lovely poem, thanks for entering.
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so romantic and so sweet i like it a lot. good luck in the contest!
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so sweet and so every poetic! Love it!
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thank you for entering!
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Hmmm... I have to say I think I may have liked it more if it rhymed. Perhaps not. Who knows? I did like the first line, even if it was a bit cliche. I have a thing for speaking of heavem, angels, devils, etc., especially when it relates to love. It's always envoked my senses for some reason. However, I wasn't all that pleased with the last stanza. It seemed a bit lax and not, oh I cannot think of a word or phrase, but I will let you know when I think of it. I think it was perhaps it was because you had love in two lines right next to each other, and the fact that i love you was one of them as well brought the quality down some. Best of luck.
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This was wonderful... Thank you for entering and the best of luck to you in my contest
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this was a great poem..i really enjoyed reading this write and found it very interesting..your words were strong, powerful and emotionala s well..keep writting you are very ta;ented and good luck in the contest
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Very sweet, and a happy ending! Yay! I like pieces with a happy ending after always seeming to read lots and lots of sad poems. Thankyou for the entry!
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thank you so much for the entries i loved each one of them and most brought about tears thank you yet again.
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penned like a true artist!!!
a nicely penned piece of artistry that was refreshing to remininsce in. I liked the flow and the simplicity of this piece. Words fail me on this true beauty of poetry!
-Keep the ink flowing!
-Good luck in the contest!
-Monachos -
Thank you for entering
This is a very nice expression of love
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Thumbs Up!
"Seems a long time ago when this happened
but never the less it was true,
to prove it we're still very much in love
and we both say,I love only you".
Wow...undying love.....incredibly sweet!
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You know how to put love into something that can be so fresh. I think you are talking about your first love and how you always love him, but only hoping you could last. But sometimes that doesn't happen! We could always wish!
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WOW I LOVE LOVE LOVE THIS POEM IT IS VERY TRUE!!!!!! I LOVE THESE 2 VERSES
There was thunder as our two hearts came together
and I'm sure our bodies started to glow.
I knew that I would never recover
but I wondered just how much it would show.
Seems a long time ago when this happened
but never the less it was true,
to prove it we're still very much in love
and we both say,I love only you.
well worth the applause!!!!
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Sweet
Very Sweet and loving. Amazing in its simplicity. Wonderful Work. -
Brilliant
This is really good. Love flows through this piece. It is heartfelt and written from the heart. Very very good piece of writing indeed to the one that you love. Well done Norman.
Wayne
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lynnkte
it was good but keep it going
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SO VERY BEAUTIFUL!!
This is so very BEAUTIFUL and TOUCHING!!
I love every single line in this poem! but
my favorite lines are: I held it close and pressed it
to my heart. There was thunder as our two hearts
came togather. So very POWERFUL!! Thank You!
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Oooh wow. It's so difficult to write a love poem without going overboard and being really sappy, or really cliche. This, though, is something new to me. I absolutely adore it. The imagery is so fantastic, I had to just smile because I could see the whole thing unfold. You did a really fantastic job with this. It's beautiful.
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Love and heaven go togeather
you're words make me feel like when i did when i asked the Lord into my life one night -
Heartening
What a charming and refreshing read, so many stories (whilst beautifully done) full of pain and sadness, something whistful and loving like this is a joy. Giving this poem the hug it deserves.
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