Every day I go to school
then dread to go home.
Unlike every other kid, I'd rather stay at school,
3:30 strikes fear into my heart,
a numbing senceless fear,
but it's not so bad as 4
For at 4 I get home and He is there,
He's always there, to tell me of how useless I'am,
To break apart my hopes and smash open my dreams,
His fists leave marks, but they are nothing compared to what He's done to my mind.
To fear one's home,
To have no hopes,
to have no dreams,
Is not the way I want to be.
And Although life is still within me,
I some times wish it weren't.
And now it's 4:00pm......
Author notes
<3 #1 This was about the abuse my stepdad gave me luckly he's gone now.
A contest entry
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450 points, ended August 24, 2008, 11 entries
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congrats to you on the HM...it should have been more! this is so powerful, deep and dark. such a sad story, yet it made an incredible poem. and you are so lucky that he is gone! but somehow the pain still lives on after one is out of an abusive situation. it is always there to remind them. thank you for sharing in the reading list...it is a pleasure to have read this piece!
~bee
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The message is very clear and deep, although I do suggest some smoothing of lines and definitely a review of spelling adn grammar. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors.
Hetohke'e * 
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awesomenesssssssssss
i really liked it, i think u did a great job in expressing yourself
awesome work man!
keep it up!
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Thank you both very much! -pawn-
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you my man, have faced up to the adversity of this so called 'dad'? to have the courage to go home, and face what you knew was probably coming, showed that you where not one for giving in. This, in time, will stand you steadfast and true in your future. now you do have hope, your dreams can now be goals to chase after, stay strong and stand strong my man, you have nothing to lose but your own pride, and after what you,ve suffered, you won't let it go. well done, extremely well done.
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Oh wow.
Aww I am so terribly sorry you had to go through that. It's terrible thing for anyone to go through. Well done, Well done, I can sense the obvious emotion in this piece!
I hope it helps to write about it.
Thanks for entering and best of luck to you!
<3BeautifulDisaster9
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