Dressed to kill with her crystal eyes,
tonight will finally be the night.
She plans to kill as her revenge to him,
tonight the heartbreak massacre will begin.
Dressed in white she walks through his room,
she looks around with only the light of the moon.
It shines through the window and clear onto his face,
she just wants to get in and out of his place.
She wants him to die a death or sorrow,
by that she thinks her heart will mend tommorow.
So she grabs the knife and grabs his hand,
but the look in his eyes she can not stand.
Tears roll down and she apollagizes to him,
she takes the knife to herself and yells "Let the massacre begin".
Lieing on the floor in pain she's laughing inside,
blaming it all now on the look in his eyes.
So she blames him and takes her life,
takes her life instead on that massacre night.
A contest entry
- Dark Poetry by Becks.
300 points, ended March 10, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ANYTHING! by DelaneyDisaster.
300 points, ended April 2, 2007, 176 entries
Gold trophy winner
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375 points, ended April 29, 2007, 59 entries
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305 points, ended April 22, 2007, 49 entries
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375 points, ended April 24, 2007, 24 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - What does it mean to be ALONE? by WhenWillsCollide.
575 points, ended May 30, 2007, 60 entries
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425 points, ended May 25, 2007, 135 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I guess she showed HIM!
Very good twist on this dark little tale.
Very graphic in such a short poem.
Good flow,
Good rhyme.
Good job.
Good luck.
~Ron~ -
tahts pretty ironic... didnt see it coming. anyone who surprises me is... creative in a way.
this poem flowed very nicely and the events just all rolled together...NICE!
I like the rhyme scheme...it was free and was not forced. I do believe you did well on this poem -
this was a really great write..your words were powerful,strong and emotional as well..the flow to this poem was smooth keep writting your very talented
~Chrissy~ -
Wow....Im speechless.....just wow! This was so good I absolutely love it! Finalists YAY!
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Thank you so much!
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hey! this was a great write..i really liked reading this.it was different from most poems written on here! I like the twist in the poem at the end to it was great! keep writting and good luck in the contest
~Chrissy~
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dark and AWESOME!! thanx for following the rulez...the rhyming wuz just...awesome...that had a twisted ending and i just couldnt w8 for it...i started skipping lines and then i had to read it again and yeah...well ive got no clappy dudes so i cant give u any but thanx for entering!!
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haha well thanks alot it seems alot of people enjoyed the ending. thanks again! <3xx. julie
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dark and powerful, wonderfully written. congratulations on your gold, you deserved it
great write
lucy
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thank you very much
<3xx julie.
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wow, this is amazing! it's very very nice. it was confusing though at the end. i was like, "who died?" then it all made sense. it's very very good! well done.
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This is very nice.
I enjoyed it.
YOur a wonderful poet! well this is realy good
<3 sarah
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Thank you very much for the comment, and reading it.
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
<3xx.
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tremendous
very good piece, i enjoyed the twist in the tale, it had me riveted from start to finish. i want to read more of your work and i encourage you to pursue your talent and please keep trying because you have plenty ability please visit author tony yates on this site and read my poems leaving your author name -
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thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed it. feel free to read all of it if you'ld like haha. I'll deffinately be checking out your site.
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