Underneath the willow tree
Beneath the palest sky,
A diamond ring had sparkled
As she waved to him good bye.
She held the rose that bade her well.
Now that her husband's gone,
I hope they bring him back, and safely.
Those months could drag along.
Letters came, two days a week,
He was tired, but doing fine.
He always ended with a verse,
"Your heart, now mine will quicken time."
After a year, her heart did sink.
The letters ceased to come.
Was he alright? Was he OK?
Why doesn't he come home?
For seven years she cried and
Prayed for her dear love's returning.
But all the yearning, grief and pain
Did nothing for the burning.
She died a while later,
Of a broken heart they said.
Her husband came the very next day
To learn that she was dead.
Now she lays among the flowers,
Soft and strewn with light.
Below the Weeping Willow swaying
Gently through the night.
Upon her grave he stood and cried,
A single rose in hand.
He told her that he loved her
As he kissed his wedding band.
He said, "I wish you could have been...
I wanted to be here with you."
In thoughts, "But now you are though
still and calm, beneath
our Willow tree."
Author notes
This is kind of a Romeo and Juliet scenario
A contest entry
- ARMY WIVES (or army...or...well...just love) by krymsin kyss.
600 points, ended March 8, 2007, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
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this was really good! When I saw the title I thought of the song "Whiskey Lullabye" Thanks for entering and good luck
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WOW!
I really liked this one. Everything was perfect to me. Great Job.
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Well I have said it once and I will say it again....Brilliant. This is moving and I will never forget the first time I got to read it. Well done.
Bravo!!!!!
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This is a sad story of love. I enjoyed reading it. I love these kind of poems. Keep up the good work.
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Moving
The 6th and 8th stanzas especially were amazing, encapsulating for me the most powerful of the emotions in your whole poem. The rhythem was a little weak in a couple places and stumbled the flow a bit, but it didn't take away from my overall enjoyment of your poem.
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