You know
whenever there is a cyclone close to the oceans
it is the strong rain, what become
responsible for the fatalities of numerous innocent creatures
which cannot cry or even if they cry they know
which cannot be attended
and subsequently when the cyclone is over
all the dead bodies explains the scenarios during days together
and this occurs in love as well
whenever there is a cyclone of love close to the hearts
it is the strong dreams, what become
responsible for the fatalities of numerous innocent lovers
which cannot cry or even if they cry they know
which cannot be attended
and subsequently when the cyclone of love is over
all the tears explains the stories of
broken hearts during years together
you know...
PrabhuDayal Khattar
Author notes
Based on the quote
2. You asked what was wrong and I forced a smile and said nothing. Then when you had walked away I whispered... everything...
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the idea behind this is great - the likening of a cyclone to love! i love it - well done. however, in two places you've separated line which should be together into different stanzas - maybe this was purposeful but i think it would be better if you put them together.
still well done and good luck. -
Thought Provoking !
This is a very good strong write. I had to read it numerous times just to get my mind and my thoughts wrapped around it. I enjoyed it very much.
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Very nice.
Rain can be gentle... unless drived by cyckonic winds...
so it is with love... which can be gentle and tender... unless driven by unhealthy relationships that leave nothing devastation behind!
Bravo!
Marianne
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This is very good... I love the emotion that courses through it, very different from what I am used to. I love it
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AAAWWWWWWW Prabhu, I think that this has to be one of my favourites that you have written. So many true words and so so tender. Well done my friend and good luck in the contest. Val
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