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Twisted

My chains released
My shackles broken
“I regret nothing!”
Were the first words spoken

“She deserved to die”
Is what was said
“It’s not my fault
She wound up dead”

I can think of no other
Who kills like me
Killing to live
Is the way to be

Killing for fun
And living for pain
Listing to screams
Being droned out by rain

Looking in the mirror
At crimson red eyes
Reflected were shadows
On the ground and sky

Can’t you see
This pleasure I feel
Being covered in blood
Every time I kill

My eyes are cold
Like freezing blue ice
For the pleasure of killing
I must pay the price

The rips in my soul
The cracks in my heart
I knew I was doomed
Right from the start

The day I slipped
And went down to hell
Smiling my smile
Going faster as I fell

Enjoying the freedom
From the chains of life
Twisting my mind
And begging for strife

My goal in life
Is to break your dreams
Call me twisted
But I love hearing screams
~Kay~

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  • Insane-Joe
    November 20, 2008

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    Insane!

    Your poem truly represents an insane person and I loved your rhyme scheme...however it didnt exactly fallow my quote but overall amazing...good luck in my contest

  • cindyloo
    November 19, 2008

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    I like it. I can hear the insanity screaming from it. Very well written and nice job on your rhyming.

  • kendhal22
    September 28, 2008

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    Nice

    Nice, but this is thirty words or less, please revise or bring in a new poem. Thank you for coming to my contest. Kendhal22

  • Mercury Rising
    July 6, 2007

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    A very well written poem with some wonderful rhymes and an over-all dark and intense feel about it. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering.

    David

  • SandraMVeinot
    July 6, 2007

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    kind of a mind teaser this one is to me...but anyways...

    and thank you for sharing with us your viewers..

    and all the best to you; love!


  • Synthetic-Nightmare
    May 24, 2007

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    WHOA......

    THIS IS GREAT! Absolutely amazing! I love the rhyme and EVERYTHING ABOUT IT! It's so deep and dark, as if the reader is the kiler. GOOD JOB


  • th3sl4y3r
    May 10, 2007

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    This is a very well written poem, and I actually think it flows very well, great rhyming and the rhythm is good, a tad awkward here and there, but you pulled it off nicely.. the wording is great and gives lots of great imagery.. I love these lines the most..
    "Looking in the mirror
    At crimson red eyes
    Reflected were shadows
    On the ground and sky

    Can’t you see
    This pleasure I feel
    Being covered in blood
    Every time I kill

    My eyes are cold
    Like freezing blue ice
    For the pleasure of killing
    I must pay the price

    The rips in my soul
    The cracks in my heart
    I knew I was doomed
    Right from the start"
    wow, these stanzas are so well written with very good insight into the mind of the murderer..
    well done!!
    thank you for entering my contest and good luck..
    peace and light always..


  • FlipperSwitch
    May 2, 2007

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    Wow, I haven't had an entry like this yet. Wonderfully written; inside the mind of a killer is a very good idea and I would say you pulled it off easily. Thank you for entering, good luck!


  • burdened
    March 2, 2007
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    this is a great dark write, it was chilling the way you have written about killing as fun, favourite lines:
    "The day I slipped
    And went down to hell
    Smiling my smile
    Going faster as I fell"
    great write, and good luck. XxX

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