Shadow puppets in a new light
Lost innocence at a mere caress
Eyes straining to see in dimly lit vision
Voices tuned out but for a Mimes charade
Withdrawn into the hole with Alice
Cringing not in fear but self doubt
Why was the Rabbit late?
Mock turtle unwilling to peer out from within the shell
Peripharel cornered and told to tear
Sunlights chill unwarming in frigid emotion
Trembling nerves on the edge of reality
Tantrums guilty of a Palm Readers confession
If He was psychic He should have known
Placed into pockets with Change
Coins flipped to no avail
Heads will spin
Tails will tell All
Reaching out to strike a bargain
Out of Touch nor desire to be
By My own hand i shall rise
And wave goodbye.
A contest entry
- Sadness and pain by x-Black-Butterfly-x.
370 points, ended March 7, 2007, 15 entries
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Abuse in any form is sad and dramatic..life changing. You have done a great job with the Alice theme and what a child may feel...These lines speak to me in volumes..Sunlights chill unwarming in frigid emotion
Trembling nerves on the edge of reality... Such Fear, pain, angst cry out....ty for sharing...awesome..! Good luck!
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very nice
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great metephors
loved Alice, that one words sais much
this stirred quite a bit of emotion in me
all well done
good luck in this contest
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very visually striking and emotionally transpiring.
Blue
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This is very moving. The reference to a child's story, Alice in Wonderland, makes it all the more dark and chilling. The combination of innocent childhood references and the more harsh subject matter makes for a very good read. Good luck in the contest.
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This was really good i got confused but tht cld be the fact i was meant to be doing work and my teacher crept up on me. but after re reading it i found it highly intresting and i could feel what you was saying in it. thankyou for entering and good luck
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confused how? i just used alot of metaphor to ease my way through a delicate subject
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