This dark rich night
with it's pulsing needs
rocks me and makes me
dance with the moonlight
kisses on my soul~
Your name on my lips,
soft and sweet
I tremble to think
you might leave me
come morning~
You whisper questions
as I cover my truths
in the warm dark winds
The stars blink bright
all my shattering fears~
Then your smile it teases
and your eyes...
they close
as the night folds over
my unspoken heart~
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Written June 25th, 2003
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Very nice sweets, Thank you for you input on my poetry, your just wonderful, please continue to write beautiful, wonderful poems, thats from the heart your work is such.
shareone -
Beauty
Sensitivity
Warmth
Passion
Fear
Longing.
Of course, you took these emotions and made a work of art out of them.
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excellent
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Your writing is superb in this piece
The last line captures the essence of the
heart succumbing to love so brilliantly
I agree with all the remarks above
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I love how that you could be talking about being afraid that a lover will leave or the very night itself...this is brillian writing...you at your best actually...I love it...gave me shivers...Ro
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What is left unspoken remains a pain that stings forever...at least in my opinion. This piece "hurt" me in a strange way...
The pic was an excellent choice for this post.
UB
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You painted a beautiful scenario here, Susan...very nice indeed
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there's a lot of mystery & a lot left unsaid in this reticent poem...
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How many times have Our hearts gone unspoken
This touches Us all so deeply
We have all been in her place
You always stir such emotion with your poetry Susan
What a beautiful writer you are hon*
and what a perfect pic to go with the poem
"Just beautiful" ...Wonderful work!
Love and Smiles to you Sweety* :):) oXo ~Mina oXo -
Wonderfully lovely........such peace within this piece however an underlying sadness that she does not speak......I like the softness you used to bring forth the unspoken emotions.....great write...lisa anne
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beautiful write
Hello Susan,yes I am back amongst my friends again
this is a beautiful write,flows so lovely..
love and hugs
Janetxx -
Sis.. this is very nice indeed.. soft and sensual.. hearts waiting to beat as one.. well penned as always..
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Anxiety and love seem to go hand in hand. We are so afraid to say what is in our hearts when we're not sure how the other person really feels. You expressed those fears so well in this excellent poem, and the picture is perfect!!!
< 3 Maureen
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Susan this is just a beautiful, sensuous write. I enjoyed every line hun. Stellar!! Blessed be
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It definelty potrays deep sincere intimacy and a sense of wanting. Very nice. well donm
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Excellent
Last night I had a bad dream
You had left me,it did seem
There was I in bed alone
To sigh,to sob,to moan
Awakened in early morn
Good spirits soon reborn
My romance had not died
You smiling at my side
Well written poem Bill.
Edited on Jun 25, 3:06 p.m. because ''. -
Tre Bien!
I loved it. It tantalizes and makes us draw conclusions. It's beautiful in its own way. I like how it doesn't let on exactly about what it's talking about. -
So sensual and sexy.Leaves you wondering, asking so many questions.Truly leaves the reader open to attain their own meaning and answers. You did an absolutely lovely job with this piece. Also the picture is wonderful and just adds to the piece even more.
Nice Write!
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Beautiful! So expressive, and the lyrics draw the reader into the intimacy of the moment.
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Absolutely Amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Susan, sweet sis, this so just simply gorgeous, perfectly penned in Susan~style!!!! I love it all, and the picture and background are perfect!!!!!!!!!
Love ya,
Karen
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Susan , what a beautiful write so full of emotion and longing for things of the heart to come with a guarantee .Unfortunately that never is the case:( Beautiful pic btw....you of course eh
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Reenie -
You whisper questions
as I cover my truths
in the warm dark winds
The stars blink bright
all my shattering fears~
This is simply exquisite Suz! How are you doing? I haven't seen you around lately.
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Wow... what a haunting image of the unspoken things that come between people. Expressed so beautifuly.
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=( im like that all the time..afraid that by morning i'll wake up and all what i had experienced will be a dream..i hate that feeling, its such a lost and lonely feeling...the picture fits this perfectly, that searching feeling, looking up to the sky..kinda hoping...wondering..beautifully expressed as always Susan...
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This is lovely, love the way you express yourself, it is full of love and expectancy and fear and desire and I love the last stanza. The first is absolutely beautiful too. The second one so alive with hope and fear and longing and love. In the second last I could feel the heart beating fast, the mouth drying, the fear very palpable. Love the picture
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A vulnerable heart needs to find it's strength over finding security. Strength always comes from within. Find it from truth. I hope you will.
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i feel just like Daoine. you left a lot of questions to ponder. i think thats a good thing. it gives the reader something to think about while reading it and afterwords. sort of like an aftermath LOL great write.
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i like this, its like i understand in a way, i'll never understand your experience that made you write this, but i apply it to my own life experiences and understand. keep writing, love the poem
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Leaves me wanting, needing to know what the heart craves.
Sensual, sultry with longing. There are so many questions
left unanswered in the closing of those eyes.
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