"The rules of the game", said God,
"Are to play in the spirit of sport.
To not implore,
To not encroach"
But the games people play
Are not the least that way.
They do implore, they do encroach.
They do not employ an honest approach.
They lie, they cheat, they idle away
All their life and all their play.
They do not ever realize
That they bring upon themselves, the strife.
By the love they keep themselves from giving
By the songs they keep others from singing
They do not ever realize
That in doing so, they bring upon
Themselves, all the strife
A contest entry
- A Letter From God To Man by Naridill.
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Thanks for your entry
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It seems tat each day is an extension of the games we play with ourselves and with life in general... overtime so to speak. Your poem is very thought evoking, makes the mind work a bit and absorb the essence of the poem.
Excellent work
Dee
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This work was considered in an effort to qualify you to apply for judgeship in the Raven Contest.
(As part of the review process, the contest sought to examine the first available work by all authors applying for judgeship. This decision was based on a desire to understand each writer's origins.) -
i am reading this work in an effort to determine my vote for you as a raven judge. viyanna rosemarie
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who cannot relate to this? Beautifully expressed! Please keep penning.. everyone feels .. its how much and the way we can artculate. Beautiful indeed. Im glad I chanced upon your page.. Thank you
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Very good poem here. I like the idea behind it. People do tend to do what they can to get ahead and be better than everyone else. Over all, this was very well written, it just has a few grammatical errors with the commas. That's understandable though, because of the pauses they create. I suggest either removing them or breaking up the lines at those points to form the pause. Again great write!
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TRUE ONE
NICE ONE DEAR!!
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