magnificent ensemble
perform symphonic sonatas
a peaceful pianist
entice flirtatious flautists
while violins and cellos
serenade the crowd
oboes and clarinets
reflect a beating heart
melodic perfection
conducts a musical extravaganza
A contest entry
- Short & Sweet and Really Upbeat {Edit} by HerbalGoat.
300 points, ended March 13, 2007, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow...this is a good peice ... i can almost year music
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Just randomly zipping through names. I like real names or what appear to be real names, although mine is... Sorry!
I hear every sound written, and because you're being subliminal, I can even hear the instruments you left out. I love the finale!
"melodic perfection
conducts a musical extravaganza"
Nice!
[psa]
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I hear the splendor of music in your words. The art of instruments making melody is one that I am a true fan of. You brought a symphony into play with this poem poet. Brilliant! I wish you the greatest rapsody from this work!
Blessings & Love ♥
Renee
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This is a great piece. Music is the epitome of life.
Revision pointers:
L3 - "flutists" is actually "flautist" There's a common misconception between the two. -
I listen to a lot of different kinds of music, but when life is really rough, classical makes me feel better than almost anything. I think you've captured well the essence of an orchestra. It amazes me when a writer can do something like that in just a few lines, especially when you need to incorporate so many elements to describe a single (yet complex) "thing" such as an orchestra. Very nice work.
Good luck to you in the contest and best wishes!
~J.
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I can hear the music in this poem!
This is beautifully written and the alliteration you've incorporated into this piece works very well.
I love the beating
line! Stunning!
Cris
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WOW
I am truly impressed at the way in which you put words together. It's a special gift to write so well. I always knew you were special:-)
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Delightful!
Fantastic, you've carefully chosen your words so that your poem is music. I don't really like classical music but last night I watched Alanis Morissette in youtube with an orchestra backing her and it blew me away! This is a brilliant ode to the orchestra!
Love, light & peace
Georgia
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