You pay a price for superiority
For owning surfs and the pain you gave
Your once magnificant Palace
Is now ruins and reminds us of your past
We still don't get it
And probably never will
But we all pay the price
For the hate we show
So find love in your heart
Show it on your face
And you will find a castle
When you get to heavens gate
Author notes
Have you ever wonder why there are so many ruins,
In a list
A contest entry
- 20 Lines or Less - Any Form - Amaze Me! by Cupcrazy.
450 points, ended February 28, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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definitely makes one think.
actually yes, i have wondered why there are so many desolute structures, and most of them i have found time itself even had to disregard. but as long as we acknowledge them, then maybe they aren't as ruined as they appear to be. great writing with your thoughts on this one!!!
-brian.
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Great
I really like this one
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Very nice piece, captivating thoughts. You have a couple of typos in the first stanza, where I believe you meant "your" in the second line, and the tense is wrong in the last line of that stanza, should be reminds maybe instead of reminded. Thank for your fine entry. Hugs, Bunny
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well written keep up the good work
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hmmmm Heaven's gate...... that's like Oz right? lol A very uplifting write. Keep pennin!
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Many profound thoughts I am thinking ... each major society or civilization comes and goes and their remains buildings and temples that fade into the distance of time....this country is just over 200 years old and having been born here to go into a coutry where the building date back centuries it is awesome to comprehend such ancient times when you are standing there in front of the door wondering what were these people like..plus manyother questions ...you raise many thoughts.Thank you for the pleasure
goo luck in the contest.
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Wisdom at Its' Best!
Our dear Poet Knows of what he is speaking..Because he is there where all this problem began. He is bringing out a spiritual truth here..We may own castles,and have wealth,but if we operate in hate, we will lose it all..But if we operate in Gods' unconditional love,we will heap up wealth in heaven..not money, but treasures far greater..This poet knows of what he is talking! Bravo for saying it and being where you are.Bravo Good write! -
excellent
Great Job on this, I love the last stanza, oh so true are those words, cause to carry love in the heart is to put a smile on the face. I look into this contest and seen the image you wrote about and you did a fantastic job with this.
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