Ghosts of tortured servants murmur their fatal agony
in the hollows that were once windows.
Ancient favored days of crowns and lore
now merely memories trapped in crumbling walls,
turning riveting at night by floating candles ascending missing staircases.
Woman's sobs echoes from a second floor chamber
on every full moon night,
blood curdling screams followed a plea,
"My lord, please no!"
Passers by cringe even during the day,
a cold chill of fear's icicles creep the spine.
For even in daylight the specter of the sadistic castle's king
wanders his domain holding his severed head,
but possessing eyes of vicious contempt
for all the serfs he slaughtered
before others finally ended his murderous reign,
their voices rising from the grassy knolls unmarked graves,
most often at midnight,
when the castle gives up its
emerald secrets.
A contest entry
- 20 Lines or Less - Any Form - Amaze Me! by Cupcrazy.
450 points, ended February 28, 2007, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Holy Moly-
How did I miss this one..I must have been fliping my nickels or something
Powerful verse You have penned again Sweetness
What images that surge through the veins~
Could not help but inhale and exhale wanting to read more...
Thank You for sharing this and Congratulations on Your trophy win
Best wishes to You!!
Many blessings always
and my Love
~ Desire~*~
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I thought this would be a great place for a honeymoon.
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I could not agree more
What an adventure and the energy just Touches to the core...
You are so darn Creative..
Can I borrow Your brain..
Pleaseeeeeeeeeeeee
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You got my heart love. I thought my brain was over in your hands already. Or was it just parked by your side? Hard to tell from where I'm sitting these days.
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This was just amazing, so chilling and filled with emotion and mystery. I loved it. Thank you for this very fine entry. Hugs, Bunny
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Thank you Bunny. Glad you enjoyed it.
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This was very chilling, it made me shiver. I'm not sure about this line: 'turning riveting at night by floating candles ascending missing staircases.' It seemed too long for the rest of the poem to me, and I had to read it twice to understand its meaning.
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Thanks for the nice comment. It was kind of hard to shorten that one line and keep the meaning. They do take reservations for overnight visits if you care to spend the night. LOL
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ooh wow
this had a nice midevil-esque ring to it! I realy realy like the name you gave it. It's so mysterious. lol. like how you refer to the old windows as hollow. bravo
good write
~mary
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Thank you Mary. I hear they have great room rates for a night's stay. I bet that would be fun huh?
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I'll stay if you do! *grins*
-mary
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'emerald secrets'... rigt click>add to dictionary! I will stealeth thine phrase.
A very good luck in the contest!
I get to learn a new thing everytime I read your works.
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Thank you. Always thrilled if I contribute to the dictionary.
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Oh Wow
Oh now this was very good and scary lol
Well done Daddy !!!
Love Jackie
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Thank you sweetie. Always love your comments.
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