Trying to focus
It only becomes worse.
My life is spinning out of control.
Ideals, hopes, and dreams are
Nothing but dizzying streaks of illusion
And I am the eye of the storm.
I try to steady myself but am
Struck down by the blinding glare of hatred.
If only I could project it all
Back into oblivion.
My head is pounding like the beat of
Furious footsteps marching endlessly
In no particular direction, for no reason.
My knees are weak with love but now
It's hard to stand my ground.
My hands are shaking like an autumn leaf
My lips quiver when I speak,
My breath is shallow.
You can barely hear my voice in the confusion.
But now the night comes, the air is cool
And there is no wind.
My eyes are closed but steady.
My heart is calm, my legs are strong.
The storm has passed and I
Move on.
A contest entry
- Inspire Me by Violaceous Rainbow.
329 points, ended February 28, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - For Abused Youngsters by aslanlight.
450 points, ended March 31, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Rape, Abuse, Assault by silencethequestion.
300 points, ended May 5, 2007, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - How you feel about drugs by 6-Ft-UnDeR.
300 points, ended May 17, 2007, 21 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pain and Depression by thedevilsgirl.
475 points, ended November 16, 2007, 55 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A Good Old Poem, from younger years by Violinstrings.
650 points, ended November 15, 2008, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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wow very vivide leaving much to the imagination yet so blunt on the side of emotions...you wrote this wonderfully
keep writting your very talented
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im glad that you overcame such a horrible destruction of your life...this is an amazing poem and it's nice to see a poem about drugs w/ hope...i definately recommend you share this w/ some people, maybe they can learn something from what you've experienced
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beautiful. I really like this poem. It is full of emotion and I really REALLY can relate to this. This is exactly what i was looking for. good luck with the contest
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http://allpoetry.com/group/info/abuse+victims+and+survivors+and+all+against+abuse
Here's the link to my friend Elvenfairy's group 'abuse victims and survivors and all against abuse. Thanks for entering. -
I like this piece. It really expresses so much frustration, great job.
Thanks for entering
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You said good luck....it appears "Blurred Vision" was/is in a contest. I didn't enter any contests....??
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the confusion and pain that you show in this poem is very strong yet having the confusion in the background and the pain of the confusion straight-forward and in-your-face. I like it and good luck. -
Hey, cool poem you have here. I liked the description and the imagery that you have used to really help the reader picture it all. I really liked the part:
"My head is pounding like the beat of
Furious footsteps marching endlessly
In no particular direction, for no reason"
I thought that was very cleverly written, as well as when you were talking about all the different parts of the body as well. The words and the flow were great too. Awesome job with this, I enjoyed reading it!
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Thank you. That has to be my favorite poem. (of mine) I need to start writing again. Everything I've submitted was written when I was 14-16 years old.
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Well done. You sister all wraped up in a few words. This is really great. I like how you use love and confusion to express even more confusion. Well said.
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