Take wing my heart
to heaven high,
push back the flood
of ebon tide.
cast off the words
"I doubt I can"
Take wing my heart
and love again.
A contest entry
- Short & Sweet and Really Upbeat {Edit} by HerbalGoat.
300 points, ended March 13, 2007, 24 entries
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Very beautiful!
One revision pointer. After you mention "Take wing," place a comma. I love your last two lines, and with the comma, it would be even more beautiful, as well as meaningful.
"Take wing, my heart
and love again."
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