Tiny babies scraped fresh
and bloodied from the womb,
never got the chance to suck air,
God's answers to some of men's woes,
wrapped in the flesh of newborns,
silenced in aborted dreams.
20 year old soldier walking patrol
in Baghdad's twists and alleys,
catches shrapnel in his throat,
suffocates in about five minutes,
staring up at the air he will
no longer savor, with a wife, his kids,
all blown to ragged edges round his adam's apple.
Screech of tires and two toddlers like missles,
niether of them secured in safety seats,
hurdle over the dash and through the windshield,
then back through the glass again,
tiny ruby lips gasping for air,
finding only death suckling their last remnants.
So many stop breathing daily,
unjustly in so many horrendous ways,
there is so much to inhale and enjoy,
breathe for them, make them your cause,
live because they couldn't,
do what they might have,
and life will get easier,
breathing will have meaning again
they moulder in boxes airtight,
you have the whole world to respirate in,
breathe on my friend,
simply because you can.
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A contest entry
- Suicide - make it stop! by reinhardt-napoleon.
750 points, ended May 11, 2007, 36 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Oh, that's scary! And great...
Your flow is wonderful, and so is your poem. The last two lines are a perfect ending, full of power and hope.
The title is great. I like that you stopped after "is" and put only dots after it...
Oh, it is so true what you say!
Thank you for entering this poem, and good luck (btw: don't worry that I don't applaud, I will when my contest has closed.)
Keep on writing - I'm keeping on!
Stop suicide.
Joey
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well done
we all need to remember the message of this well written set of vignettes on the precious nature of life...well done..PK
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wow
....well.. it doesn't seem as though i'll take the gold this time, you've certainly proven you deserve it more...such imagery..so dark, and yet so inspirational.. bravo..
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OH MY WORD this peace is so wonderful it made me cry a little bit... wow you are sooooo talented.... this is amazing you will surely go far w. your poetry...
Love,
Tim -
Your words are powerful and bring tears. A very emotional read. Makes one definitely appreciate life even more after reading this.
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THis broke my heart.. I have a motto..live until you die. So many do not appreciate the gift of life while others dealing with great adversity appreciate every breath they take with joy.. and some leave way too soon. Good write.. you more than made your point. Blessings. Debby
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This is so good. I can't think of a better thing to write such an amazing piece about. Excellent work.
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