With each step taken
I go back two
It seems like sometimes
Life does subdue.
It fades so quickly
Yet feels so long
Especially when
It all goes wrong.
There is no answer
Just live life well
Before we say our
Final farewell.
A contest entry
- ~Infinite Regression~ by -Ink Artist-.
525 points, ended March 7, 2007, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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WISE AND WONDERFULLY WRITTEN!
I know for me nothing seems to go right very often but still I go just as I have, never giving in to temptation.
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Congrats on your HM! Lots of good sound wisdom and advice to keep one foot in front of the other. Luv ya, ♥ Belle
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Very Good
This is realy interesting
I espacally like the graphics
All very clever
Rick
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Lovely work! The honesty in these short lines is powerful. It does seem to me that every time I think I'm getting a step ahead, I take two steps back. Your creative presentation on the page is interesting, as if you are slowly diminishing. Very well done! Thanks for your entry and good luck!
~Lori
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This is such a great work of poetry and creativity. I love the pictures....they seem to add an extra zing....to this wonderfully written work.
Liz
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very creative piece, loved the diminishing picture idea. Sometimes we skip ahead 5 or 6 too....a very good piece.
Rory
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ugh... the words get too cheery at the end I mean, how do you pick yourself up after repeated starts...
--thinking about ya -
Excellent!
An outstanding write and presentation. Deep expression of emotion. Very good flow, rhyme and tone. Excellent word choice. Nice alliteration. Well crafted and a most enjoyable read.
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Only Two?...
I often take three back. I just came back from a triplet--LOL!
Very original, sis! I especially appreciate the message!
Thanks, your majesty!
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oh, I like this....we all feel like that at times...taking a step to only go back two....great write.
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intersting presentation
The message of the poem is outstanding, and I love the presentation is fabulous. Great job Sis,
*Go with God*
Valerie
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I think we all live within the infinite Regression,
and perhaps as you have said we are after all mortals and perhaps they rhyme and reason to it all is at times we have to in order to move along,
I enjoyed this write and the unique way you have taken the picture and made it smaller as you expressed your words, Drives it even deeper,
Great work ~not blowing puff~ I like deep seeded writes
Well done and thanks for sharing,
Warm thoughts
Frozentearz -
I think this expresses my state of mind right now... you penned this so well and I love the picture here, fabulous job
Karen -
Nice
Short but to the point. You write well my friend
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Man what happened to Mr clappy! I clicked on 3 of them...trying again
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This is great seester! You penned another masterpiece; I love that pic! Great job!
Frogz~ -
Now THIS is a perfect piece. I love the presentation, and the poem just screams! Great job, Sweetie. Love, PattyMa
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