The watchtower struck me down to the count of 8
[da dum da dum]
the dissolution of a Girl - her curves a kind of
sloping trap [ I caught you in the soft
flower petal of the apex of me
- a star junkie still searching
for infinity ]
and in that secret place,
you were struck dumb at
the severe complexity
of such things as the sorrow
of boys ( with their dreamy eyes
and quiet inabilities)
-if only you had been a cripple,
a broken vestige for which I
could solely love (if only you
had carried your heart in
the mottled scars of your Truth
and I could be the history of a prayer)
You could have been guiltless then.
an Innocent with the imperviousness of saints,
instead of the dirt I tracked into Church
along the bottom of my hard-soled shoes.
Author notes
Nothing really inspired this, it just kinda came out. I do kind of like it though
yeah, the title has close to no relation at all to the poem but it sounded kinda cool, right? =/
A contest entry
- Take me away by --Beautiful--.
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holy flippin mermaid! i love thiissssss
its ... ahh i hate how i cant ever think of anything right to say but just know i love this!
♥
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"the dissolution of a Girl - her curves a kind of
sloping trap"
Is my favorite part. It is very nicely worded. I'm not sure what style you were going for but i liked it. Very good write. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck -
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Thank you for the comment. I wasn't really going for a style, just kinda wrote.
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"(if only you
had carried your heart in
the mottled scars of your Truth
and I could be the history of a prayer)"
There's something about you, sweets. && I love it.
Noise&&Kisses♥♥
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hmm unique.
Definately a unique and creative piece. well penned, rythmn and flow terrific. Thanks for sharing a great piece, best wishes to you my dear.
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