in the circle of an iris
between pinpoints of light
refracted shadows
fog
upon the mind
with clarity is seen
past mistakes
reflecting
within shimmering tears
of glass on glass
there is a void
where future is
hidden
and truth is shaded
beneath each iris
colored with its own
doubt and insecurity
is inevitability
and finality
with only hope
sweeping
in brushed lashes
framing
desire
Author notes
photo: REUTERS/Claro Cortes IV (CHINA)
A contest entry
- Fog by ea.
390 points, ended February 27, 2007, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I thought this was very creative and I also saw an eyeball in this photo so this struck me. Thank you. (Please credit the photographer when you have a chance, thanks.)
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A piece where the words give the vivid imagery a perception that needs no criticism. Awesome
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I believe a wonderful poem needs no illustration and this one of yours paints such a complete picture that I was captivated. It was a different perspective on "fog" and very well done. Good luck in this contest. Peace
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It may not need an illustration, but in this case, the write was inspired by the photo and that is a type of poetry called "ekphrastic" which has a very long and respected tradition starting with the ancient Greeks who would catalogue works of art with descriptions. So I like to let people know about this because when you have an ekphrastic piece, and you include the art that inspired it, you have a more well-rounded sensory experience, just as you have when you listen to someone read their poem or sing it, as opposed to just reading it on the page. The art is a key to the words and whether or not the poem stands on its own is another matter that must be determined by each individual reader who comes across it.
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Okay, first I want to apologise for my commenting absence- Firstly, I lost my home internet connection for some time and was only able to get online between lessons for two or three minutes at a time at college; and secondly I have been extremely busy- I have final exams coming up and have been trying to get an immigration visa for when I'm done with college.
As for the poem, lol. This is such a great piece to be able to come back to, Bunny
To me, it seemed to be speaking about the leap of blind faith we have to take when falling in love with someone- do tell me if I've got it completely wrong; because otherwise all that follows shall be nonsense.
I adore how subtle your imagery is- it makes the mental picture all the stronger- and it gives the poem such a soft feeling with a gentle flow.... Bookmarked
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i like it. the expression is absolutley fanominal! =) I see a great picture with this without the picture at the top but the pic at the top fits it well. Great job ! =) ♥kelc
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